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Passion's Symphony
Contributed by
NoSaint
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Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 09:37:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
eroticpoetry
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Fingers gently tracing skin
Passions symphony begins
Lips searching expectantly
Excitedly playing the melody
As hands find a moist spot
Striking a cymbal type shot
Harmony now the tongue plays
As to nipples in time sways
Now they drum to a primal beat
As with desire they feel the heat
Bodies pulsing in movements strong
Fireworks around them belong
The finally of movements divine
As to exhaustion the musicians resign
Only to start the symphony once more
As they have loved many times before
Copyright ©
NoSaint
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2006-07-24 09:37:59]
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Re: Re: Passion's Symphony
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Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 01:53:50 PM AEST
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| Very nice poem, it speaks of passion making it's own music to me. Your verses are short they could use more imagery to keep us wanting more or maybe that was your intention all along. |
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Re: Re: Passion's Symphony
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Sunday, 14th September 2008 @ 07:27:53 PM AEST
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Break at certain points spoil the beauty of the write.
Sorry don't know if i should comment in the negative |
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Re: Re: Passion's Symphony
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Saturday, 6th November 2010 @ 01:36:24 PM AEST
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| bit more imagery but good |
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Re: Re:
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Tuesday, 25th October 2011 @ 09:08:13 AM AEST
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| good...but go for more imagistic details and a bit more of telling |
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