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A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
Contributed by
spike
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Saturday, 5th November 2005 @ 12:58:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
GriefandTragic
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The lawn cushions me as I kneel, the wild one, brought to heel. Flowers wilting in my hand, these sojourns more than I can stand. Here among the silent spaces, I can speak to your good graces words that I could never say, 'why do loved ones go away?'. Wrapped in a heavy cloak of grief, guilty absence, no relief. You burrowed deep into my skin, so here I am and yes, you win - drawn despite my clear distress at using this place to confess problems I just can’t get past, 'how come friendships never last?' Anger wells from deep inside, a feeling that will not subside. It took so long to connect with you, your absence I just can’t get through. Bitter tears track down my cheeks; these are lessons no one seeks. I scream till voiceless at the sky, 'why do people have to die?'
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2005-11-05 00:58:47]
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Re: Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
(User Rating: 1 )
by on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 07:10:41 PM AEST
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S~
This was positively gut-wrenching. As I perused through your
rhyming couplets, (so well done, I might add), I was profoundly
moved. I don't think there is a person, (who possesses a heart)
that couldn't be moved so. I have known this feeling. All too well.
That kind of, rip your heart out and throw it to the ground, sorta
grief. No answers, dear friend, can I offer even to myself.
wonderfully written. Gosh, but you amaze me more with each write.
Cheers!
~B |
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Re: Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 01:45:07 AM AEST
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I really felt the pain and anguish in this poem, I can definitely relate. The narrative flow works well and the rhyming couplets are spot on. Great write, Spike.
~Jenny~ |
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