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Destiny Awaits
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 05:19:23 PM in AEST
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Why must it be you sing the song meant for me?
Stuck. Caught in a web of three
Temptation of a stratospheric proportion...
Curious---Captivated---Marvelling in distortion
What should we discuss today; or rather what not?
Think. Enter my mind and get lost in thought
Denial is a river in which we drown...
Lust---Friendship---Walls breakdown
Shall we go out for dinner at a nice quiet spot?
Sit. At this table for two and embrace what we've fought
Soak up the moonlight and absorb the stars...
Freedom---Love---Healing old scars
Lets take a walk, but where should we go?
Stop. Hold me a moment under the lunar glow
A leap of faith well worth the wait...
Harmony---Happiness---Give in to fate.
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 05:40:53 PM AEST
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Wow Scorp, there is a lot going on simultaneously at diffferent levels. So many things to contemplate; and so many directions things can take. This poem could take one in many different directions. The complexity of it, while still appearing simple, is what impresses me the most.
Very well done, very well, Scorp
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 05:49:59 PM AEST
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| I love the FEEL of this, something on the surface, yet another story lurking below....awsome job scorp! |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by she_smiles on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 05:53:07 PM AEST
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hello friend. :)
I really enjoyed this...I liked your expression as you wrote about a particular relationship with someone close to you. I definitely got a sense of fate that links you two together...and also a sense of time spent apart, not acknowledging that one was meant for the other. This is something that's happened in my life...recently, actually. So it's fair to say I connected to what you wrote, and I just wanted to say I enjoyed this poem. :) |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by CarolinaBlue on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 08:27:55 PM AEST
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| Wow! Scorp, this one has so many twists and turns in it, I love it! Leaves so much for the mind to contemplate and it flowed beautifully. ~R~ |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 09:11:47 PM AEST
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good poem, scorp. i liked reading that. i like the directions the poem takes the readers in... good work! keep it up!
~sprints |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by freckle on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 09:17:55 PM AEST
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Great poem Scorp! Nice flow....intriguing...captivating. Really nice work!
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 09:44:12 PM AEST
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| yay, i finally came across a poem worth reading. the homepage is very disappointing tonight. excellent poem, scorpaporpa. wonderful format especially. ::finally glad not to have to say something about bad grammar:: no doubt, you will keep up the good work, so i dont have to say it =] |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 10:32:07 PM AEST
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man oh man that was the best poem i've read ever and i look to you to be the only one that can top it.
prefection is in you 100% |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 11:45:13 PM AEST
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wow alot of twist and tuens here .
An awsome write scorp.
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by sweetangeluk on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 11:06:42 AM AEST
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Many years ago could have related to this. I loved it.
Exeptional remarkable write
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by gwenevere on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 03:31:57 PM AEST
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| A story without an end.Only destiny knows the out come.Great write,Ros |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 05:12:03 PM AEST
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This stanza says it all Scorp..
"What should we discuss today; or rather what not?
Think. Enter my mind and get lost in thought
Denial is a river in which we drown...
Lust---Friendship---Walls breakdown"
relenting saddness my friend..
(here for you through good and bad)
Great write!
B
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by jyssvw22 on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 05:31:29 PM AEST
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| scorp, this was truely an amazing write, thank you so much for sharing this...great flow, nice images, just very well done |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 06:26:28 PM AEST
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WoW Scorp what can I say? You leave me speechless. Your work is so remarkable. Well done.
hugs,
Dreamer |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 08:48:27 PM AEST
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| Beautiful. Simply Beautiful. |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 11:03:42 PM AEST
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I loved how you did this...great write..
Jenni |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 05:52:00 AM AEST
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such an excellent write...the style was very unique and interesting...
let the eternal search for love continue
wizard |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Dorkfish on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 12:21:14 PM AEST
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| Wow, that was awesome. I really enjoyed the funky style. I thought it was great. |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by boobiepeach on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 10:56:26 AM AEST
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great scorp
a life-altering love... some are luck enough to have one. fate is a huge part of my life. good write.
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th May 2010 @ 12:06:09 AM AEST
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I should come back to your pages more often. I love the style of this. The verbs at the beginning of each second line. I feel as though I am sitting at a reading you're giving.
Nice, Scorperiffic.
ulTIMate
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 6th June 2014 @ 09:39:45 AM AEST
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truly beautiful, this is great, love the happy peaceful positive ending:)
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Sunday, 23rd November 2014 @ 08:02:07 PM AEST
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Give in to fate...
Thats a big one to swallow. I would rather think I am blazing my own trail than to admit things are predestined to be so. I make my own way, said the naive little fish lost in the sea. Thats me.....I'm the fish! |
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Re: Destiny Awaits
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by JamesStockdale on
Thursday, 17th September 2020 @ 06:21:51 PM AEST
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Wow, I love this.
Willofree said what I thought.
The structure is cool and it has so many levels.
Love the bold excerpts too...
I really got into it. |
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