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Can't Tell the Difference
Contributed by
jyssvw22
on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 06:15:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
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In contrast to the prettiness that walks on its own
The ugliness falters when confronted with its own
In a deliberate opposition to the earth's powerful pull
I walk singularly, humming, a provocative tune
In defiance, I have not shaved my face in weeks,
Let someone speak,
Or dare say that I am intellectually weak
Or challenge me to a verbal duel
In which the looser is presented as the fool
Starting with this question;
What is the first thing they teach you in school
Share, your thoughts with me, I beg you to respond
I ask of you peacefully to give me some attention
To ask me my name, or where I'm from
To ask me the same, the same question
That I wish to know, that I die to hear
You say to me, that I am yours, and welcomed
In contrast to the mountains that stands high and firm
My neck dangles, and strangles, loosing air in turn
In a convincing way, the clouds show their intentions
The grayness that overcasts, has ruled out, a dry protection
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Re: Can't Tell the Difference
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 06:59:51 PM AEST
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Very good job your writing intelligent.
if im not mistaking the first thing they teach you in school is manors and respect.
by the way whats your name where you from.
how old. And shave already damn it just joking. but email i would be glad to gain some knowledge from you. or just chat |
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Re: Can't Tell the Difference
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 08:54:57 PM AEST
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Hey caveman! Shave already damnit!! Jyss; what's your name? What's your number? Can we be pen pals?? lol j/k
I honestly have to say that I really love this write!! Something about it is wonderful...the mixed emotions, and your always impressive expression. I don' t think anyone who has read your poetry would say you are intellectually weak!!! You are amazingly talented, and I'm glad others are starting to take notice too...The way only you can weave a write always astounds! I like the fourth stanza best. Well done jyss.
Scorp ; )
(flipping u the bird for your comment earlier!!) LOL |
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