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Deceitful You
Contributed by
CarolinaBlue
on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 07:58:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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~xXx~
Alone, Waiting, Wondering
will he come home tonight?
Anxious, Unsure, Pondering
what secret is held by the light
of the day. Sun comes and goes
the feeling inside it just grows
and it grows. Angry, Hurt, Reposed
I sit and I try and compose
myself at the table alone I wait,
the pit of my stomach, it aches
so bad. Trusting you a mistake?
One I hope I'm not likely to make
again. Sad, Lonely, Confused
off to bed, where your place is unused
once more. Empty, Abandoned, Bemused
my heart feeling battered and bruised
and then, Awoken! to the sound of a door
quiet footsteps heard crossing the floor,
to the shower you sneak off, once more
to cleanse scents of the woman before
me. Jealous, Hurt, Betrayed
our future together unmade
by your deceitful little charade
What a price for your sins I have paid!"
Copyright ©
CarolinaBlue
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2005-06-30 19:58:26]
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Re: Deceitful You
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 10:13:15 PM AEST
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I have been where you are now..
and the only thing I can say to you is..
leave now-
If not, you will look back on this time..
(when you are happy again)
and scold yourself for not leaving sooner..
(lest you enjoy being treated as such..)
great write my friend..
B
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Re: Deceitful You
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by DorianChambers on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 11:55:43 AM AEST
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Sorry 4 your pain, the poem is well written but the subject is heartbreaking, hold on 2 your heart 4 in time it become your friend again, wish u well . . .
Ben
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Re: Deceitful You
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by bernard on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 10:49:03 AM AEST
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| Unrequited love is a terrible thing but two timing is the lowest form of betryal. Tell him to go to his other women and look for someone you can trust. There are many honest men around one only has to look.He might not be so handsome but his character will give you the love you so miss. Keep smiling from bernard |
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Re: Deceitful You
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by priss on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 02:33:42 AM AEST
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| almost painful to read, probably because i can relate. sad, but an absolutely wonderful poem. |
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Re: Deceitful You
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 12:50:46 PM AEST
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Very glad to read your author's note...Nice job with this, and I'm happy to know you've moved on...
Scorp. |
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Re: Deceitful You
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by Dorkfish on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 11:20:18 AM AEST
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| Very good. The style of thsi poem is very unusual, I really enjoyed it. I am sorry this happened to you. Hey, I'ven been there it was one of the most horrible times in my life. Great write and great style. Keep it up! |
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