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Torn Apart
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 04:40:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I'm here all torn apart
Standing in pieces of my heart
Its like a jigsaw puzzle,
But no one knows what its supposed to look like
I keep my lighter burning
So I won't die in this suffocating darkness
My heart is blowing away
By this bitter wind
And I've almost given up
Holding on to this one last piece
Its my last lifeline all I survive on
And you, you smile at my feeble attempts to survive
Why do I strive for those few
Moments of happiness
When its surrounded by pain and frustration
Life is so pointless
Just 80 years of pain and s***
One setback always leads to another
I feel like I've gone through hell and back
God has left me to cry in the mud,
But still, but still
I CAN'T curse him and die
My skin hangs loosely from my bones
Oh, what a wretch am I
And I'm here all torn apart
Standing in pieces of my heart
Can someone slip me some cyanide
So I won't have to face the jury
I'm like a broken doll and,
The tears are forming, like precious jewels
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2003-01-08 04:40:00]
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 05:25:13 AM AEST
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| this is wyrd_faerie...just wanted to say this poem is absolutely beautiful...oh, it's so sad, so true...beautiful... |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 07:58:27 AM AEST
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"God has left me to cry in the mud"... my favorite line in this beautiful bittersweet poem.. so well done.. thank you for sharing this one!
Always Nessa |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by OreO on
Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 10:07:02 AM AEST
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Very deeply written beautiful poem Joel, this one was captivating, i couldnt take my eyes off of it from beginning to finish..i think the depth you put into this one is a little deeper than what is even written here.....you have a beautiful heart my friend dont ever stop writing ...
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Re: Torn Apart
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by thorns on
Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 05:07:42 PM AEST
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| David and Job and probalby a bit of yourself. ricness and depth in this piece. |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Eloise on
Thursday, 9th January 2003 @ 05:26:57 AM AEST
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| this is such an awesome poem! its brilliant. how i wish i could write like that! |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Ilhar on
Thursday, 9th January 2003 @ 09:13:31 PM AEST
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awesome write you had me crying... i believe in you and definately your talent ...please keep the poems coming i look forward to the next
Sharon |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Ronald on
Friday, 10th January 2003 @ 11:42:26 PM AEST
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| This is sure a sad poem. I hope God will alleviate your sorrows soon enough |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by frozensuicide on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 09:26:15 PM AEST
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| oh i like this one. this one is good, i know your feeling... things will get better! |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by karoody on
Monday, 17th February 2003 @ 11:53:19 PM AEST
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| i like this a lot, joel. i can definitely feel your pain here. |
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