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Why were you taken....
Contributed by
darkfairylove
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Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 03:36:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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You would take me in your arms
And show me that you cared
But the day God took you away from me
I knew you'de no longer be there
I felt empty inside
Like my soul died next to you
Why did this happen
When the only love I knew was you
You came to me in a dream one night
And said your love was still true
But how can I go on like this
Never again to hold you
Dreaming of you everynight
And crying just to once more see you
I go out to the grave yard
Where you will forever sleep
I lay my head upon your stone
And gently begin to weep
I know you'll always watch over me
And in your heart always care
Maybe it would be easier
If I was to die and come up there
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darkfairylove
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2005-06-29 15:36:58]
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Re: Why were you taken....
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by forsaken_soul33 on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 04:39:18 PM AEST
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I am so sorry for your loss. It is hard to cope with the fact that you willnever see a loved one again. I hope that you may find love again. I don't mean for anyone to replace him, because I know that it's impossible. I just hope that youo find happiness again. If you ever need anything, you can talk to me. I really enjoyed reading your poem, keep writting.
bye,
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Re: Why were you taken....
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by forsaken_soul33 on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 04:39:51 PM AEST
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I am so sorry for your loss. It is hard to cope with the fact that you willnever see a loved one again. I hope that you may find love again. I don't mean for anyone to replace him, because I know that it's impossible. I just hope that youo find happiness again. If you ever need anything, you can talk to me. I really enjoyed reading your poem, keep writting.
bye,
☺Mando☺ |
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Re: Why were you taken....
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by forsaken_soul33 on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 04:41:24 PM AEST
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I am so sorry for your loss. It is hard to cope with the fact that you willnever see a loved one again. I hope that you may find love again. I don't mean for anyone to replace him, because I know that it's impossible. I just hope that youo find happiness again. If you ever need anything, you can talk to me. I really enjoyed reading your poem, keep writting.
bye,
☺Mando☺ |
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Re: Why were you taken....
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by forsaken_soul33 on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 04:42:06 PM AEST
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I am so sorry for your loss. It is hard to cope with the fact that you willnever see a loved one again. I hope that you may find love again. I don't mean for anyone to replace him, because I know that it's impossible. I just hope that youo find happiness again. If you ever need anything, you can talk to me. I really enjoyed reading your poem, keep writting.
bye,
☺Mando☺ |
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Re: Why were you taken....
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by forsaken_soul33 on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 04:43:17 PM AEST
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I am so sorry for your loss. It is hard to cope with the fact that you willnever see a loved one again. I hope that you may find love again. I don't mean for anyone to replace him, because I know that it's impossible. I just hope that youo find happiness again. If you ever need anything, you can talk to me. I really enjoyed reading your poem, keep writting.
bye,
☺Mando☺ |
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Re: Why were you taken....
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by AmyLee4Ever on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 12:50:19 PM AEST
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This is really good. You know what would make these poems better? If you had certain syllables in each line. Like make a pattern. First line 8 syllable... second 6... third 8... and fourth 6. Then you can start a new stanza that is like 10 syllables... 8 syllables... 10... and 8. I don't know... it just makes things sound better. When people do rhymes... one line is really really long, and the next one is short. It takes away the flow of the poem. If you'd be able to do that, especially with the way you can express things... you poems would be indestructible. Lol. You can express things well, with order it'd be great... once again, nice poem...
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