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out to kill the moon
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 01:34:53 PM in AEST
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most every morning i stare out the window
watching grass grow, trees replentish, flowers bloom
a woodsey fairytaleish atmosphere, high and low
surrounded by forest, knee-deep in nature's costume
breeze, time, a smile, and colours roll over me
to bring me back, this place might be the only one
my world of green, where i can feel free
residing in a new 24hours begun
so endless, and past, all the days that i had run
sometimes away from this life; i felt i would explode
i've lost those clouds that blocked out the sun
here one cannot run out of space, or roads
as flutters and birdsong waft from nearby
i feel like i'm looking at life, newly discovering
yet, up all hours i remain, and espy
even deep blackest pitch night has wings
alas, to live here one cannot be meek or mild
more like the creatures of this forest; attuned
even though this world is ever to be wild, look:
here comes the sun again...
out to kill the moon
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 01:55:11 PM AEST
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lol I had to squint to read this---between the small font, and colour!! This is a really good descriptive piece...Optimism sprinkled in with pessimism. Your words lead to an excellent visual, and I love the last stanza, and the way you ended this...Well done!
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by bernard on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 02:06:17 PM AEST
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| One heck of a job to read the blue print. I pereevered and found a lovely poem the theme out to kill the moon is an excellent way to describe the coming and going of each day and night. Top marks from bernard. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 03:28:16 PM AEST
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Beautiful poem here I loved the images that
the poem conveyed. The keyboard music
was a nice addition even though it kind of
scared me as it didn't really fit with hardcore
music I was listening to... lol.
"i've lost those clouds that blocked out the sun"
Loved that line.
Bobo (Joel)
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 04:00:48 PM AEST
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A lovely scenario poeticly crafted and fine tuned 2 perfection . . .
Ben |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by country_girls_angel on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 04:06:20 PM AEST
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Beautifully done...I love this, as all of yours...you write so effortlessly it seems...This is wonderful!
Shari :)
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by emystar on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 04:23:31 AM AEST
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Girl it's great to see new post from u.
Another masterpeice u've created.
It shows your uniqness in thought and written word.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy
Please don't make us wait this long again. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Mild_Tempest on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 01:52:23 PM AEST
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| Wonderfully written, a true composition from the best. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 09:01:17 PM AEST
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| =] you always impress me with your poems. i loved the ending most in this, which is as it should be in my opinion for most poems. start out amazing the reader to only progress to brilliance, which you master every time. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 03:23:01 AM AEST
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An amazing piece of writing Nessa. Keep them comming.
Jane xox |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by venkat on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 04:47:31 AM AEST
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Awww..Dearest Nessa.from the beginning
to the ending, the poem is breath taking..
very beautiful and captivating..and further I have to agree that one can not be meek and mild to lead such forest life..hugs and love:-) venkat |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 04:50:10 PM AEST
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Breath-takingly beautiful...as only you can do it!!
Miss ya grrlfriend...
Hugs and woofies...
Jenni |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by springchic1979 on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 07:56:32 AM AEST
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Hello again Nessa! It has been a while but I am back at ypdc. As always you have done an excellent job..it was a pleasure to read such a beautiful piece.
*hugs*
Yvonne |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 12:38:22 PM AEST
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Wow, this is really beautiful. I think the music really added to it. Great write, I look forward to reading more.
Shannon
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Spazzo on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 10:21:25 PM AEST
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This is so amazing and really beautiful.
Great job!
Take care.
Scott |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Kitty06 on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 10:59:23 PM AEST
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| This is a beautiful poem, I really enjoyed reading it. I love the line 'even deep blackest pitch night has wings.' Most people point out the obvious and cliche beauties of nature. But this one is subtle. Truly amazing. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Archie on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 08:42:15 PM AEST
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| I am kind of hal blind so I could not read your poem as thoroghly as i wanted can you darken the text some, please. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 03:35:29 PM AEST
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| a very uplifting write. Things just have a way of cycling and often when down, we need only wait for the sun again... |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Channing on
Sunday, 11th September 2005 @ 03:06:50 AM AEST
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| Very nicely written, one could almost feel as if they were there... |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Jeff_Scott_Morehead on
Sunday, 11th September 2005 @ 08:11:51 AM AEST
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Wonderful write...Brilliantly written...
Jeff |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by xxbreathlessx on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 06:32:32 PM AEST
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| such imagery, such talent! great job...i love the last line "here comes the sun again...out to kill the moon". genius. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 01:23:16 AM AEST
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Nessa:
I love your poem.. the title took me to it, because I love the moon.. it scared me, I thought you were going to kill my moon lol.
I do the window thing in the morning, sun up early.. breaking... read my bible... at night soon as that moon is out, I am there..
I love, everything, trees, flowers, animals.. green grass.... this is absolutely gorgeous..
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by remote on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 03:07:13 PM AEST
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| Today was a lunar eclipse, earth got in between to kill the moon, it tried for about an hour than gave up, moon is full now. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 29th April 2007 @ 10:09:15 PM AEST
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| It pays to read others comments. I turned up the sound on my speaker and got to hear some music while I read. Double the pleasure suited me just fine. Another wonderful read. |
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Re: out to kill the moon
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by colinb on
Sunday, 13th July 2014 @ 10:25:02 PM AEST
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| This is so beautifull Nessa |
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