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Heart Breaker
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 07:51:34 PM in AEST
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Heart Breaker
A glass heart
Shatters apart
And pain bleeds
Intricately.
Blood's poisoned
By wounds reopened
For pain to spread through
When it takes over you.
Yet, a broken heart
Is the only part
That can never be
Poison free.
Black is worn to mourn
The happiness never born.
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 07:55:41 PM AEST
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Bravo Jennifer, as always you write to amaze, another opne for the cynics right..lol..as always
~Clark |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 08:04:43 PM AEST
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This was a wonderful write! As you always do, I loved the first stanza and how it flowed so well it really set the mood for the whole piece and just made the poem amazing. Then ending was a powerful statement that really concluded your poem, very nicely written!
Always a pleasure to read,
--amanda-- |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by nhisname2005 on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 08:09:16 PM AEST
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| wow.. I never looked at a broken heart like this because all I felt was the pain. But now looking deep into it... becomes your poem. great write.... sandy pgl |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 09:37:05 PM AEST
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Indeed this expression of ones self digs at the root of thruth, the 2 sides of the heart
hate and love when broken, beautifully done
in your true form, ever the blantant artist . . .
Ben |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 09:54:41 PM AEST
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great poem
not everyone realizes that a broken heart never truly heals.
wizard |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 10:29:14 PM AEST
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beautiful saddness Jen..
I love the last two lines..
much happiness to you in the days to come..=)
B |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 02:44:43 AM AEST
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Ok i've been away for a while, so forgive me if i missed some of your other poems LOL.
I like this, the lines where simple yet theres so much meaning behind each word. A very creative write i must say.
Jane xoxox |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 08:53:20 AM AEST
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you evoked the broken heart very well your mind is creative thats what makes you the poetess you are
Michelle |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 10:42:42 AM AEST
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This is an excellently expressed poem...The way you manage to tell a story and vividly display emotions in so few words always amazes me. A strong, solid beginning, (which actually reminds me of something similar I wrote way back when) and a superior ending---I LOVE the last two lines!!
Great job Jen.
Scorp. |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 10:53:52 AM AEST
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Oh yeah...btw thanks a lot!! Now I have a crappy Mariah Carey song stuck in my head!!! *shudders* Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr.
Scorp ; )
(Tries in vain to make it go away) |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 11:49:38 PM AEST
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once again Jennifer you truely amaze me with your writes.this part iike the most.
Black is worn to mourn
The happiness never born.
awsome |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 08:11:51 AM AEST
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I love the last two lines especially..they made me ponder quite a bit.
Kindof hapiness never born vs happiness lost vs happiness potential..tec, etc...you get it. |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 10:01:12 AM AEST
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I've always thought that "shattering" is a very good description for a broken heart... because sometimes it doesn't just break... it shatters rather explosively, I think. There is something sort of painfully beautiful about that sort of experience... and this. Anyone that's ever been there will recall the feeling as they read this --- which, is my way of saying... well done.
~Snemmers~ |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 04:44:09 PM AEST
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a poem that breathes... as the heart longs for love again as it tries to gather a breath of hope... beautiful writing... hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Heart Breaker
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by harlot20 on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 10:50:42 AM AEST
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| nice pretty poem, well laid out and very well written, and the subject is beautifully described, but it lacks the punch. thats my only moan lol but other than that its good :) |
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