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Amidst An Ailing Heart...
Contributed by
Eternal_Dreamer
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Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 04:57:19 PM in AEST
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I was so solitary with sadness
Ordained by bitter hate
The image reflected in the mirror
Was in a tedious and desperate state
I forever seeked true guidance
On deaf ears my pleas fell
Then one momentous day came
When opulent hope arose from my realms of hell
You entered my forsaken life
Put out the flames within my hell
Freed me from irated pain
Helped me break out of my shell
Your seeds of hope were sown
Deep amidst my ailing heart
I was like a new budding flower
Sprouting, making a fresh new start
You purified my once darkened heart
You washed stealth from my mind
The seeds of hope flourished
Suicidal thoughts at last are left behind
The tunes of an ill fated elegy
Now play, but cannot be heard
For with hope faith is delievered
The mournful elegy is lost for words.
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 05:19:26 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC...the best poetry site on the net..
This is an awesome write.... well done!!
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 10:04:30 PM AEST
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a very poignant and profound write..
I love the last stanza..
"The tunes of an ill fated elegy
Now play, but cannot be heard
For with hope faith is delievered
The mournful elegy is lost for words."
fantastic-
B
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 08:21:59 PM AEST
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Excellent...truly remarkable write. Such emotional depth spilling out into this piece...I love the positive ending too. Great job!
Welcome to YPDC btw!!! I look forward to reading more of your work!
Scorp. |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by sweetangeluk on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 12:32:14 PM AEST
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Another smashing poem. I will be sure to comment on more of your talented writes
Awesome
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 06:57:15 PM AEST
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Brilliant, absolutely brilliant. Wow, hopefully someone will love me like this and think I could make a difference in their life. You have a golden pen and I hope you keep penning here. Welcome, my friend.
Rita
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 07:50:37 PM AEST
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well woven words, a gorgeous poem:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 05:45:24 PM AEST
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sounds like you got swept off your feet...you seem to be very proficient at expressing yourself...another excellent poem.
wizard |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by AmyLee4Ever on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 06:30:51 PM AEST
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The final poem posted... *sigh* The last one is great as was the others. Dark and depressing to hopeful and bright. This is part two of "My Heart's Forsaken Fate". It looks as if the person that would rid your fate has come. : ) This all sounds like you got revenge to your pain. I like that. It would be awesome to get revenge of pain. It's like you're now free. Well, I am so happy that I was able to read your poems. If ever you post more... I will have to read them. You are my favorite writer here. I just love your poems... they are written so well. Thanks for your great writes...
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 07:11:13 AM AEST
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oh my oh my
very great writing
the last stanza i love it" LOVE IT!!!! |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Archie on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 06:12:57 PM AEST
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| It is always good to see some one breaking out of the grips of depression and loneliness. I am very grateful that I get to write words of congrats and not of I know you can make it one more day and please don't give up. |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 07:52:59 AM AEST
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Well written, and well done. You cannot be pulled out of depression and sadness easily. May your way be bright.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by DreamPoetess on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 04:29:43 PM AEST
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Melancholy is not fun at all:> Find the root from where it comes from, hopefully it will pass on, if it lags on, always check it out with a doctor:> Huggs from,
Meagan :>
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 09:46:45 PM AEST
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Yes Sue, this is a gorgeous write.
Who does not identify with the feelings and emotions expressed so beautifully.
But, philosophically and religiously there is a lot to say.
One experts that cares for souls believes and advocates going so deep into the dark night, - i.e. not fleeing suffering, but going consciously through it with remarkable unimagined consequences.
St.John of the Cross called it the ":Dark night of the Soul" and he loved it.
Great write Sue
Thanks for sharing
Blessings
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by tiggytom on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 08:34:11 AM AEST
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| A beautiful read, i get lost in it as I read I really do enjoy your style of writing. seems to come naturally thanks sue x |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by jmpy84 on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 02:22:51 AM AEST
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| great job its good to have you back |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 04:49:18 PM AEST
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Very reflective, sort of melodic dance of words here, important to have this type of self awareness, physical and or emotional pain, our soul suffers, enjoyable read RL
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by gah_veh on
Wednesday, 8th February 2006 @ 05:55:31 PM AEST
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| nice poem great wording very deep liked it alot. |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Spazzo on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 12:34:57 PM AEST
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This is an awesome poem, the end is really positive.
Take care.
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by MisfitMe on
Sunday, 28th January 2007 @ 05:04:03 PM AEST
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Ahhh, hope in all its uncompromised glory!
Yours is a heart to be celebrated, again & again &...
RealLove&MuchAppreciation
~MissySis |
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by myheartsvoice on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 12:55:42 PM AEST
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" I was so solitary with sadness
Ordained by bitter hate" . . .I forever seeked true guidance On deaf ears my pleas fell"...
these two lines are awesome, i have felt like this ". Your writting is magnificent. You posess a natural greatness, so sincere and true to life. Beautifuly done.
myheartsvoice
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Re: Amidst An Ailing Heart...
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 09:52:54 PM AEST
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| To be brought up out of the depths of despair and loss....AND to be able to write so well about it!!! Now that's a wonderful thing!! |
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