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scream
Contributed by
luinil
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Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 06:19:45 AM in AEST
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Can you hear a voice screaming
On top of the wind
Dancing and bleeding
And burning her sin
Can you find your way stumbling
Through midnight’s storm
Lead by guilt and this troubling
Memory of her scorn
Can you see her there crying
Alone in the rain
Will you leave it all blindly
And now will you stay
Night is wicked
But morning is just a new nightfall
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luinil
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2005-06-28 06:19:45]
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Re: scream
(User Rating: 1 )
by Shorty_88 on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 06:39:18 AM AEST
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Hello luinil
I thought your peom was pretty good but i think there may have been a better way to end it instead of a statement.
Apart from that, very good write
Kind Regards
Tara |
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Re: scream
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by budge on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 09:17:31 AM AEST
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| deep from your own emotion i enjoyed the read! |
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Re: scream
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 10:35:03 AM AEST
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I thought this write was pretty good...It could've been tweaked here and there, but overall I enjoyed it. Keep it up, and welcome to ypdc!!
Scorp. |
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