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I Can Still See The Moon
Contributed by
wizard
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Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 12:26:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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(this has been re-posted due to some weird characters that appeared in the first post)
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Re: I Can Still See The Moon
(User Rating: 1 ) by gwenevere on
Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 02:25:42 PM AEST (User
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It seems ehat I am the first to comment.i yhought this was brilliant.what an inagination.i'd have nightmares foreber,Ros |
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Re: I Can Still See The Moon
(User Rating: 1 ) by brew on
Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 05:28:53 PM AEST (User
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What a look at lying and seeing the moon, and what ones imagination can, fill and make the feelings do. What a dark and deep write, yet not as sad, as some are. Seems you took the choice of the better path.
Fabtabolous.!!!!!!!!!!!
Brew~ |
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Re: I Can Still See The Moon
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 12:29:32 PM AEST (User
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Nice job---wow! Very descriptive, gave me an excellent visual...This was more of a story to me than a poem, but I loved it! Dark indeed!!
Scorp. |
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Re: I Can Still See The Moon
(User Rating: 1 ) by Man_On_High on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 08:05:37 PM AEST (User
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Yea!
I agree with scorp..more af a short story than a poem..
that aside..I'd say some very brutal darkness here!
this write is so decriptive..I had to read it twice
in order to absorb the whole thing.. lol
what an amazing take on darkness bro..
"he said no words though his message was clear. He’d let me return if I’d do his work – killing and maiming – to bring him more souls. He knew my answer though I remained silent."
That is darkness the world over-
great write
B
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Re: I Can Still See The Moon
(User Rating: 1 ) by wizard on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 09:35:42 PM AEST (User
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yes...it was more a story than a poem...but i wasn't sure if it qualified to be posted in the short story section...sorry if i posted in the wrong area.
wizard |
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Re: I Can Still See The Moon
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 11:20:48 PM AEST (User
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I am not one for dark writes but I especially enjoyed this... It was very refreshing. The imagery was fantastic..
Thank you..
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Re: I Can Still See The Moon
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kitty06 on
Thursday, 7th July 2005 @ 10:13:17 PM AEST (User
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I love the details of the senses in this poem. The crackling of the leaves and the fire, the smell of the soil. The description of the demon's appearance and the shrieking laughter is what really ties in the theme of darkness in this poem. Although the moon is usually a little cliche for dark poetry, I like how it's used as the character's small triumph rather than the becon of fear and evil. Excellent work, as always. |
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