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Release me
Contributed by
tres_estrellas
on
Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 06:23:51 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The heat falls over me
a flush of stinging
the thoughts in my head
are raging
I feel so trapped
by you
I need to feel
your skin on mine
and I need to be with you
I want to hear your voice
calling my name
I know I'm dreaming
and you can only see
what you want to
but the feelings
are hurting me
I'm in pain
And I need to see
your face
I want to touch
your stomach
But you're so far away
from me
And I hate this place
I need to escape
from this god forsaken place
I need to run away
and destroy my past
because I can't do this anymore
I can't live my life for them
I need to be released
and you help
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2005-06-25 06:23:51]
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Re: Release me
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by Zandria on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 06:58:42 AM AEST
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wow.
hits close to home, with the exception that, for me, they have no idea.
thanks for the reflection. |
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Re: Release me
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by DragonBlue on
Wednesday, 8th February 2006 @ 01:43:05 PM AEST
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Your poem flows well, has good visuals. I saw no spelling/typo errors. My only suggestions are to break it up into stanza's so that the thought pattern is began and ended. Other than that a very good read, indeed!
Write On!
)O(
DragonBlue
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Re: Release me
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st October 2006 @ 06:24:31 PM AEST
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| I Really liked this poem!! so beautiful! |
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