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Pull my puppet string
Contributed by
In_a_While
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Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 01:10:05 PM in AEST
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pull my strings and sing
i'll sway to music playing
Like everyone, i'm wooden
on a stage where i'll be saying
"You can't burn like me!
i see though eyes of stain
i turn to charcoal ash
then sketch the people's pain!"
pull my strings until i wave
to a crowd of painted faces
they applaud a puppet's god
despite wooden disgraces
she tore feathers from my wings
and poured tears into my heart
i'm clipping all my strings
i'm tired of playing a part
dw
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Re: Pull my puppet string
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by Mild_Tempest on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 07:52:00 PM AEST
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| That's such a magnificant compostion. I loved it. |
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Re: Pull my puppet string
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 08:43:38 PM AEST
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The thing I love most of all your work is the simplicity of it..
no puncuation..implied only-
and no capitalazation..
I find that so retreating in every way..
leaves so much to the imagination..
has a dreamlike quality..
your subtlety is unmatched-
b
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Re: Pull my puppet string
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by boobiepeach on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 10:34:04 AM AEST
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i loved this the imagry about the ash and sketch is wonderful.
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Re: Pull my puppet string
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by Willofree on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 11:00:01 AM AEST
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I really like this poem! The use of a puppet on strings is masterful. The poem flows extremely well in dealing with no longer playing a part...being genuine. Format and style are great.
It reminded me of a book titled "Pulling Your Own Strings".... forgot the author?
Great write,
Will
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Re: Pull my puppet string
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by Pats4eva7 on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 04:18:17 PM AEST
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WOW! Im very impressed, this poem is apsolutly terrific! I love your work, every poem I read i like more and more! Keep it up!
*Pats4eva* |
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