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Living Nightmare
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 09:59:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The tears drop into words on paper
my lifeless soul dissolves like vapor
A shattered mind and body part ways
skeletons erupt once their skin decays
A travesty, this life...the lies
hues of deceit from a ring I despise
BENT--- BROKEN--- SPENT
blood thirsty sins begging to repent
This future; our love....it's all a sham
your dreams, hopes, vision, you try and cram
Down my throat; it gets stuck and I choke
the hold you have on me I now revoke!!
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-06-23 21:59:56] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by spazz911 on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 10:05:38 PM AEST (User
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interesting
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 11:29:13 PM AEST (User
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Very visual! Awsome, I like it. Its a Great poem!!! |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 12:31:14 AM AEST (User
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wow scorp this piece is like awsome.
great job girl ^_^ |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by DorianChambers on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 01:15:24 AM AEST (User
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I have 2 finnaly admit this is either the best dark poetry or theres trouble in paradise they say in horror movies that if u dig deep enough into a ledgend u will find it's basis in thruth, nice write . . .
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 09:10:46 AM AEST (User
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this is a very good write
i hope you are able to break free
your life depends on it |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 01:14:12 PM AEST (User
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Excellent write, my dear Scorpy. I hope this is not your life now. If it is, get out of it. There is no time in life for pain and sorrow.
Rita |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by seci on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 05:51:35 PM AEST (User
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i love all your poems. its a rap. A plus. bravo. |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by Man_On_High on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 07:56:05 PM AEST (User
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You've much life in your soul Scorp..
"shattered mind and body"
"skin decays"
"BENT--- BROKEN--- SPENT"
end THIS lie..
so dark my friend..
so very dark-
(kissin' you on the cheek)
Many Happy Days To You!
Billy |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 10:12:45 PM AEST (User
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Wow! Awesome. Words said so well and so great! Great feeling and expression "the hold you have on me I now revoke!!" Awesome, Scorp, just awesome.
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by Dorkfish on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 12:27:32 PM AEST (User
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I loved that one Scorp. Sorry that things are so crappy, but that was a great one! |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by Dorkfish on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 12:28:04 PM AEST (User
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I loved that one Scorp. Sorry that things are so crappy, but that was a great one! |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by Dorkfish on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 12:28:05 PM AEST (User
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I loved that one Scorp. Sorry that things are so crappy, but that was a great one! |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 08:51:38 PM AEST (User
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=] the quality of your work is always above par, and thats what makes you a truely great writer. |
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Re: Living Nightmare
(User Rating: 1 ) by AmyLee4Ever on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 10:16:07 AM AEST (User
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Wow... great write. Advnaced rhymes too. Keep this up...
Jodi |
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