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Hideous
Contributed by
sheigha
on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 04:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Foul creatures lurk around
Watching me
Never leaving
Seaking out my weaknesses and insecurities, waiting to pounce
Changing things sereptisiously so nothing's stable
In an attempt to throw me off
They wait for me to stumble
using any methods
They unite
Then
They attack with full force
Trying to keep me down
Me against them, unfair
But that's the way it works
And it will continue to work as long as these beasts exist
I advise you to watch out for them
They look like you and me
And sometimes it's hard to tell them apart from those in reality
But don't let their cunningness fool you
They're there
So keep alert
And always look over your shoulder
Copyright ©
sheigha
... [
2003-01-07 04:00:00]
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Re: Hideous
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by roisin on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 09:29:37 AM AEST
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| ta for the warning ,I know the creatures well...keep fighting and writing... |
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Re: Hideous
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 12:46:03 PM AEST
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| strong message...keep writing |
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Re: Hideous
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 02:50:25 PM AEST
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I liked this and the line structure was cool I liked it. This poem is very true the 'beasts' can come in many forms.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Hideous
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by nightrider on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 07:33:39 PM AEST
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| this is great... the beasts are all too common, and it seems to me that they are becoming more and more vicious... keep on writing, you have talent. |
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Re: Hideous
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by Olddarkme on
Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 07:54:37 PM AEST
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| Interesting but is it poetry? Some of the points are true but the bulk of it is paranoid. I would like to have seen you handle it with either a little more style or possibly with a little more humor. Just my comments which are meant constructively. |
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