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Faceless
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 04:39:22 PM in AEST
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Conveniences precipitate luxuries
While the flourishing of novel truths diminish
The hope to end an enduring crisis
A revival of strategy added to the wish-list
Fatal travesty detached from its existence
And all normalcies push its persistence
Towards a finality, put it all to rest
Get it all off your chest, as God is my witness
I am going to change my wickedness
And substitute it with a miraculous
Yet earthly, version of what it takes to be me
Hence this provocation, this call out to you
Rather I should say, this avoidance, this space
A new race, the finish line. now in the starting points place
Where the march seems calmer, and the footsteps slower paced
It reminds me of a cool long summer, the night I first saw your face
A rough departure
It is my duty to inquire
I shall be leaving you now
For a modest trimester
Till the sun sets
In the sea of November
Till the winter leaves fall
So is it, your face I will never remember
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jyssvw22
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Re: Faceless
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by Chubs on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 05:21:05 PM AEST
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| i liked it. sad at the end. |
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Re: Faceless
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 07:26:53 PM AEST
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Well my days of trying to decipher your writes have come to an end, since I seem to be not so great at it...lol I enjoyed this poem just the same. You used some clever wording, and added a nice twist at the end.
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Re: Faceless
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 07:19:29 PM AEST
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a brave thought..
I love the contadiction too,
when you say..
"Hence this provocation, this call out to you
Rather I should say, this avoidance, this space
A new race, the finish line."
another great performance-
B
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Re: Faceless
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 07:40:01 PM AEST
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Deep conviction will get you through it all. I too have a problem understanding your weavings of words. Sometimes I just have to give up. Thick headed I suppose. Sorry,
Rita |
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