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Bruised again
Contributed by
wyrd_faerie
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Monday, 6th January 2003 @ 11:40:00 PM in AEST
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Crying, screaming, crawling, blind in this dark
Reaching out, stumbling, I can’t cope with this hurt
Terror in my eyes and desperation in my soul
Fed up of searching for the light in this black hole
Let me go, I’m just waiting for anger to take hold
Living hurts a little more each day
I need this self-hate but have to make it go away
Stuck inside this photograph on this canvas of despair
The world’s a whore and it all seems unfair
I don’t think being will get me anywhere
Desperation, desolation, darkness and black magick
Forces working on me, I don’t understand and I’m starting to panic
I can’t stop these voices telling me to cut, burn and hit
Gnarled silver hands on my flesh and I know that this is it
I hate life and don’t see the benefits
I just want to give it all up; I’m not going anywhere
There’s cuts on my legs and tears in my hair
I’m fed up of waking and still being tired
I can’t stand this pain and I can’t hold the fire
I’ve fallen, but all I ever did was aim higher
So, I realise my heart and my soul are no longer enough
Charred, black twisted metal, I’m giving up
I could never see the light or cope with this pain
I always relied on this to get me through again
Lying here, lying in this black acid rain
I know you never felt the same
I’m bruised again.
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Re: Bruised again
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by roisin on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 12:20:24 AM AEST
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| you have asked for comments... found this web-site 4 days ago....have read and re-read all your poems...they make me cry, so intense and emotionally charged...."living hurts a little more each day"..a truer statement could not been made....do keep writing, you are very, very good |
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Re: Bruised again
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by lilch4ever on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 12:39:51 AM AEST
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| Wow so deep and yet filled with so much emotion. Sometimes I feel like that too, but something keeps making me push foward. Nicely written nice job. |
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Re: Bruised again
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 12:44:41 AM AEST
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Wow, Lucie this was amazing. The fact that you are 14 and can write like this only increases my respect for you as a poet.
This was filled with so much anger and pain. Some poems make me depressed others make me go wow others make me go speechless words are hard to find to comment on this other than the meaningless drivel I am typing now...
'Stuck inside this photograph on this canvas of despair' I loved that line so much it just brought back lots of memories. Wow this poem is amazing. Other lines also struck me but to paste them on here for me to comment on would only be wasting them for I cannot comment on a poem like this that would be suitable for it... am I making any sense... Good poems I'm stunned
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Re: Bruised again
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by OreO on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 01:29:58 AM AEST
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Masterpiece.......there are no words for this poem.......cept "Masterpiece".....
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:.
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Re: Bruised again
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by Killer on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 10:25:08 AM AEST
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| I couldn't agree more with what OreO said...Masterpiece. |
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Re: Bruised again
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 02:18:45 PM AEST
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| your words speak so strongly it is awe inspiring...keep writing it for that is your true talent...it needs to be heard |
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Re: Bruised again
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by SmokinJoeEvil on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 02:37:37 PM AEST
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| Very good writing. Strong emotions, and great descriptions. Your wield of words is most certainly a force to be reckoned with. |
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Re: Bruised again
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by atwojay on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 04:13:31 PM AEST
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| And sometimes it's just so hard to fight back against the darkness and pain. This is amazing. |
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Re: Bruised again
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by GEQUETSCHT on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 04:28:43 PM AEST
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This is a very well written poem, and i know these pains all too much. Theres so much emotion and feeling put into this work, and thats what makes it beautiful... I think that later today im gonna go see what other works you have
Mit liebe und umarmungen
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Re: Bruised again
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by thorns on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 04:42:36 PM AEST
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| a horrific pain. vibrant, rich immagry. |
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Re: Bruised again
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by mystical_illusion on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 05:14:14 PM AEST
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Your poem was awsome. I reread it about times, and tears were beginning to swell. So well written and I can relate to your words so well. This poem was truely beautiful with all the heart and emotion put into it. Your choices of words we terrific and you have a glowing talent.
GREAT JOB!
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Re: Bruised again
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by LadyDama on
Wednesday, 12th February 2003 @ 02:43:30 AM AEST
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the sounds of your words
bring tears to my eyes
with prose such as this
you can touch many lives... |
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Re: Bruised again
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by crossmyheartwithaknife on
Friday, 30th May 2003 @ 05:44:56 PM AEST
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| wow! this poem is great. i love it sOoO much. all ur poems are very good but this one is my favorite. u are a great poet. |
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Re: Bruised again
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by afraid_of_fear on
Wednesday, 2nd July 2003 @ 05:05:10 PM AEST
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hunni, i'm sure you know how much i love this poem..the first one of yours i ever read.. tears have come to my eyes, even tho i've reread it so many times..
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Re: Bruised again
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by Ash on
Thursday, 13th November 2003 @ 01:44:00 PM AEST
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This is amazing. All your work is amazing, I only wish I could write like this. You say what you feel and it's so beautiful, I know what it's like to feel bruised again, and you've done a phenominal job in expressing it. You have an amazing gift.
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