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missin you
Contributed by
bethers_is_my_baby
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Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 05:08:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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i dont know what im supposed to do
ive ben tryin so hard to forget you
and ive realy been doin good lately
but then everything went bad
i was starting to be happy
then it hit me like a stone
a slap across the face
my happiness erased
now evertime i finnaly start to heal
i see an immage of a hole
the place were my heart used to be
till you ripped it out and stole it from me
as usual i jinxed myself
i new it was just too easy
to find someone who i could love
and just forget about what ive lost
im never gonna forget you
and ill never stop loving you
so tell me what im i supposed to do
if i never stop missing you?
Copyright ©2005 Amanda Hope Indelicato
Copyright ©
bethers_is_my_baby
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2005-06-21 17:08:53]
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Re: missin you
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by foxfire44 on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 05:19:13 PM AEST
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| a nice poem needs some spelling help but you did good |
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Re: missin you
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by Brandyx7 on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 05:32:45 PM AEST
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Nice connection... You did a very good job leting the reader know .. you care about this person... But, I personally think it would be a little bit more striking if you made it more mysterious. But, that is just my opinon.... Yes, again nice connection... And I agree with some spelling corrections, it could be better.
Keep Writing,
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Re: missin you
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by JasTrask_22 on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 06:11:16 PM AEST
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very good poem and metaphors. reminds me of someone that i'll never forget and that i love. awesome job!
Keep smilin'
JA.z.z..z... |
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Re: missin you
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by twisted_dreams on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:07:20 PM AEST
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| wow.. Amanda that poem is very good... packed with emotion.. and very well written! keep up the good work! |
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