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Dirty Bedroom
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 08:31:49 PM in AEST
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I once fell off the edge of the world
Held the mountains and valleys in the palm of my hands
Made a splash in the ocean that carried the killer wave
A cloud strategically placed, made specifically to cool me with its shade
On the ride, on the way up, on the balcony stairs
Kissing in the dark, is where we begin, is where we should have stayed
Never entering the looming bedroom, the chamber of which, dreams are made
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Re: Dirty Bedroom
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 08:56:07 PM AEST
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Oooh I really like this...I was a bit worried by the title---you never know with you!! lol I really feel this write; even though it's short you express yourself so vividly...and the ending...so bittersweet; I love it.
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Re: Dirty Bedroom
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 09:18:32 PM AEST
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a very complete and image laden write
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