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Careless Pattern
Contributed by
dorkfish
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Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 04:32:02 PM in AEST
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Taken aback
Another attack
Not knowing his causes
He never pauses
His words of unclear
Not knowing to adhear
He speaks lies
She then cries
He has no shame
He is to blame
Using her heart for his gain
Grasping all that he can retain
Feeding off her pain
Yet he's the one to complain
No ambitions or needs
Off her heart he feeds
Never letting her feelings reside
His only remedy is to hide
Hiding from what is real
Never knowing what to feel
Uses her weaknesses to take control
Ripping her heart apart til it is no longer whole
Pretending to love to gain affection
Useless words full of deception
Keeping her idle and waiting at his whim
making her believe she will always love him
Not allowing her feelings to pass
Wanting options while being crass
A once great love turned to selfish desires
He takes and takes, no sign he'll retire
Shed a few tears to keep her wanting more
Then backing out again and leaving her heart an open sore
Taken aback
Another attack
Not knowing his causes
He never pauses
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Re: Careless Pattern
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by boobiepeach on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 06:04:45 PM AEST
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wow i really like this. thanks for writting it. whoever natalie is has a good friend in you. and you just might understand. well done my yam well done.
real love is never real!
love stinks!
never count on a man who cant hold himself.
you are loved
nat
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Re: Careless Pattern
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by sride686 on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 07:22:44 AM AEST
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| A good write and very well worded but it did have a lot of anger and pain. It was a good release of emotion and it was a good read. Take care and keep up the writes and get it all out….Steve |
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Re: Careless Pattern
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 01:16:49 AM AEST
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Oh yeah! I could feel the bitterness and frustration throughout this write! Great flow; it moves at a steady pace, and I like the descriptive quality to the words you chose. This is certainly one of my faves, and I'm really glad I read this!!! Great job yet again.
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Re: Careless Pattern
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 05:11:58 PM AEST
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Very candid and expertly expressed ahd heartfelt expression of a painful love. Poem has a good rhyme and flow.
Some people take partners, others take hostages.
Well done
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