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Destructions Incapable of Creation
Contributed by
MajesticPoet
on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 08:51:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Close my eyes
And pray they doen't hear me, as I sleep tonight
The air is icy cold and I can feel my body shake
And you know i'm not alone, i'm not alone
And all hope is long gone
As the weakness will pull me down
To wake again is the only blessing
Cause i'm not dreaming
Closer now,
Hollow are the footsteps as they make a sound
I realize i'm not breathing and there's nothing I can do
But stare into the eyes of what didn't exist till now
And all hope is long gone
As the weakness will pull me down
To wake again is the only blessing
Cause i'm not dreaming
Can you hear my heart beat?
[when it flutters]
Do you know that it bleeds?
[when I miss you]
Shoot me where it hurts most?
[just make it sudden]
Tell me where to let go.
Shoot me where it hurts most, I know.
Tell me where to let go, I know.
I can't wake myself from this dream
Destruction cant become creation
Oh my god i'm not dreaming!
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MajesticPoet
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Re: Destructions Incapable of Creation
(User Rating: 1 )
by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 09:51:38 PM AEST
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Oh brilliant!!!!
I APPLAUD you!!!! Absolutely magnificent, truly. Wow...i can relate to your doubts of whether you are truly awake, i thought of that not long ago, whether my life is one big fake dream.
I like this bit the best,
"Can you hear my heart beat?
[when it flutters]
Do you know that it bleeds?
[when I miss you]
Shoot me where it hurts most?
[just make it sudden]"
I thought that stanza was great, and the beginning of the poem was very gripping.
I could sense a lot of fear and desperation in this poem, it was very well written.
Well done my friend, i likes.
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Re: Destructions Incapable of Creation
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by europeanprincess on
Wednesday, 1st February 2006 @ 10:34:33 PM AEST
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| At first i was lost, but then I read it again and fell into more what the words were and what you were really saying. I did like it and hope to read more. Thank you for sharing. |
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