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To See You Again
Contributed by
xXx_lil_pyro_xXx
on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 12:42:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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You left me today
Said bye for the last time.
I hugged you once more,
Life suddenly lost its shine.
I went over times when
I didn’t know you were leaving.
It was right then and there,
That I had trouble breathing.
You were my best friend,
A big sister to me,
And the thought of seeing you again,
Filled my heart with glee.
I called your house at four o’clock,
And stayed with you until ten.
And wondered secretly to myself,
When I’d see you again.
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2005-06-18 12:42:43] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: To See You Again
(User Rating: 1 ) by xXcrossedXx on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 12:55:30 PM AEST (User
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Good job Karis you fixed your structure, its nice. I like the second stanza the best, overall this is a good poem. Your rhyming seemed a little forced sometimes but this was good, I liked it.
I'll be waiting for more!
--amanda-- |
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