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It's an expiriment
Contributed by
xXcrossedXx
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Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 08:27:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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It's a secret disease that not many confess,
It's a secret thought thats hidden
Or diguised. It's the feeling of being
nothing and even less.
It's what I want to become,
It's the friend I want to have,
The feeling in which my hunger
Goes numb.
It's the perfection that I want,
It's the feeling that I'm better than
What I feel, the hope that maybe
I'll have something to flaunt.
It's a chance to get respect
It's a way to show my personality
Through the attention I'll get from the shallow
People who want you to be Perfect.
It's a decision I might make,
Again. Without the input of others,
It's an oppurtunity that I might take
Again. Just for a while.
Copyright ©
xXcrossedXx
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2005-06-17 20:27:19]
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Re: It's an expiriment
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 08:48:07 PM AEST
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no one is Perfect. lots of people want us to... i know, my friends and i always have the pressure... everyone does. now this is ironic, considering i like to fight it by myself, but you should talk to someone. and don't worry, NO one can be Perfect. and the people that say or think they are, well if they think they are Perfect, they definately are NOT. i liked your write. keep up the good work!!
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Re: It's an expiriment
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 07:12:35 AM AEST
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great write, I know in life they say no ones perfect but i think we should all try and live life to the best of our own abilities exercising compassion for others on the way (bloody hell i sound like the Bhudda!!)
A well written piece.
Johnny. |
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Re: It's an expiriment
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 10:05:58 AM AEST
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Great write on the true nature we must all endure! We all strive for perfection because that's what we think other's expect from us. But really they like to see us weak and falter so they themselves can feel "perfect"
I like this poem and the strong emotion behind it. I can certainly relate. ~joni~ |
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Re: It's an expiriment
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by fielding88 on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 11:43:25 AM AEST
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| What a poem you have here. I always enjoy the ability of poets to leave people guessing as to what they're talking about until moments before you end the poem. It's a skill that is truly admirable, and I have to say I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Your rhyme scheme is something you paid close attention to as well, taking a bit of a different approach to it. Overall quite the nice poem with quite a relatable message. |
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