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Swallow The Splinters
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 08:48:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Swallow The Splinters
Peer into my eyes, and see the sight of the pain
Cursed by my own self, the only one to blame
Crush the bones that hold me together,
Torture my soul that has made me no better
Show me something to gain, I've had and lost it before
I want no more of this fortune, ahh, this life, I want no more
Stretch my marred skin beyond my natural form
Bleed my sorrow out, and throw me with the worms
The time as exceeded, and I have lost all control
I have wasted the air you breath, and it's near time to dig my hole
Torment my nerves and numb my mind
Rips my eyes from their sockets and leave me blind
Ease out the tears and wipe them from my face
Shatter my selfworth, and eclipes what you can't erase
But it has finally come out, the last thing on the list
I conquer myself and my dreams, as I end sliting my writs
. . .
And it all starts again tomorrow as I swallow the splinters of unattainable bliss
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:07:47 PM AEST
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AMAZING!!! I like ur use of vivid words, i love your imagery.
Just wonderful, I am in awe of your mind, for you write such brilliant poetry clark. |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by emystar on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:08:52 PM AEST
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Very sad and gory but written well.
Please don't be so hard on yourself.
huggs, prayer,
emy |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by Zeldianus on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:18:56 PM AEST
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Awesome poem, Clark. I don't like the slitting your srists part but all in all it's a wonderful write!! Keep it up!
-Seth |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by xXcrossedXx on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:35:05 PM AEST
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UTTERLY AMAZING CLARK!! This was a fantastic post! Amazing. So many many beautiful lines with such feeling. Absolutely outstanding! I would point out my favorite lines but I would only be repeating the whole poem. Spectacular write! I love it!
*5 stars
--amanda-- |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 05:32:02 AM AEST
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wow an excellent dark dark write i love it.
keep them coming. ^_^ |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 01:25:18 PM AEST
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Wow! Clark, that last line is awesome.
The rest, it seems so helpless and lost, so sad, The last line was the same, I know, but it was more powerful than the rest of the poem.
I hope, your/their life gets better soon.
Great write,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 04:16:06 PM AEST
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| its wrists, big bro =] excellent poem, excellent. and your account page is looking better everytime i see it, looks like youre becoming a name here. ::wanted swallow the splinters on the cowrite:: |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 07:28:13 PM AEST
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*chanting Clark* AWESOME!!! The words were leaping off the page...wow. I love this!!
Scorp. |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by HoPeFuLtKn on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 04:14:32 PM AEST
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| WHOA! Your really good!!! Wow! Leaving me in complete and utter awe and total goosebumps. |
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Re: Swallow The Splinters
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by Shattered_soul on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 12:14:35 AM AEST
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arg i try not but true it be, i am jelous of thee, i read your poems so vivid and real it seems. then i read the comments of others and the jelous deep withing rises only more. i can only hope that i will one day be so great. remember your not forgotten
shattered_soul |
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