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Darkness
Contributed by
JustAGirl001
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Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 07:04:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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As I sit in darkness, my fear overules,
It seems as though dark and light are having constans duels.
As I sint in darkness, a single teardrop falls,
It seems as though I'm letting down my inner walls.
And as I sit in darkness, I sit and wonder why,
you said you'd be there for me, and left me here to cry.
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JustAGirl001
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2005-06-16 19:04:36]
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Re: Darkness
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by Shnyzz on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 08:16:07 PM AEST
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| It's tough when someone betrays you. I think this poem captures the feeling pretty well. |
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Re: Darkness
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by Sinned on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 08:20:15 PM AEST
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JustAGirl001
No such thing as just a girl-----"Girls are special"
Your pome short as it was said a lot. The guy needs a lesson on feeings.Dump him--move on.
Your poem is nicely written.
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Re: Darkness
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:25:29 PM AEST
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well done, very sad.
It is hard to describe betrayal but you have done it justice.
Keep your chin up, there not worth your time if they hurt you. |
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Re: Darkness
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by xXcrossedXx on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 08:53:50 AM AEST
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Your talent is very promising. You have a way with words, keep it up.
After looking at your other poems I only have one piece of advice, instead of telling us this is about betrayl, this is about love, etc. Write the poem so that we know what its about without you telling us.
Great work! Keep it up.
--amanda-- |
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Re: Darkness
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by justme03 on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 08:32:07 PM AEST
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i think this is my fave of all the poems uve put on here so far
idk why i just liek it a lot. LYLAS
~Kortnie~ |
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