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My Love
Contributed by
AliB
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Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 03:14:25 PM in AEST
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My love for you deepened
Heart swelled at just mere thoughts
Entwined, our climax heightened
My inner secrets caught
To love you was forever,
I gave myself to thee
I was at your mercy
If only you could see,
But, you thought that you could handle
A lover on the side
I blew out all our candles
My respect for you had died
I gaze upon the mantle
At your newly widowed bride.
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AliB
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2005-06-16 15:14:25]
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Re: My Love
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 04:06:19 PM AEST
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For a poem you didn't try your best at , this came out really really good.
It was a convincing piece which i'll give you credit for. Nicely done AliB.
Jane xoxox |
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Re: My Love
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:46:55 PM AEST
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well...for not trying you did a remarkable job.
I especially like the first two lines. Beautifully written.
Good job! |
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Re: My Love
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by xXcrossedXx on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 07:57:52 AM AEST
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This was an outstanding poem for not trying too hard! Great job I liked it a lot.
--amanda-- |
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Re: My Love
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by boobiepeach on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 05:34:46 PM AEST
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i loved this. wonderful write.
i especially liked.......
At your newly widowed bride
it has so many depths
nat |
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Re: My Love
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by Dorkfish on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 05:46:23 PM AEST
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| That was GREAT! |
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Re: My Love
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by Dawny on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 02:20:02 PM AEST
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Glad you got good marks, considering you didnt try this is very good, nice use of emotion.
Hope you are well
Love Dawny |
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Re: My Love
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by althea_kendry on
Thursday, 13th March 2008 @ 06:55:23 AM AEST
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i cnt imagine wat this poem woulda been like if u'd actually tried because this was absolutely amazin!! ur a great writer n i love th feelin i can c behind th words
i actually laughed (which dsnt happen a lot) at th last line .. newly widowed bride .. hahaha in a sadistic way tht seems reli reli funny to me .. like sweet revenge in a twisted way .... maybe tht's just me ....
anyway i loved th poem :)
continue writin!!! |
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