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Render Me Helpless
Contributed by
freckle
on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 09:11:19 PM in AEST
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Render Me Helpless
Render me helpless
with your touch
The fire
of desire
You ignite
each time
You look, You touch, You taste
You bring the heat
to life
within my veins
It flows
molten
swift, hot, heavy
Render me helpless
to you
I wait
anticipating.......
Carol
Copyright ©
freckle
... [
2005-06-15 21:11:19]
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Re: Render Me Helpless
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 09:26:26 PM AEST
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| this reminds of a romance novel, carol. =] i see this as getting the point across, but with enough taste as to not push me like many poems on here. keep up the splendid work. |
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Re: Render Me Helpless
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 11:58:37 PM AEST
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A nice poem carol along with a nice style . . .
one of the last true poets on here . . .
Ben |
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Re: Render Me Helpless
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 05:36:30 PM AEST
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Nicely done! Classy all the way...I like it!!
Scorp. |
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Re: Render Me Helpless
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:45:41 PM AEST
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your simplicity is second to none..
such a strong write.. this..
B |
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Re: Render Me Helpless
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 12:55:20 PM AEST
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I agree with E9, this is very tasteful, and not at all over the top like some poems can be.
I like this. The words work well, putting an image across, without giving too much away.
Great write hun.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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