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I wish I had gotten Laid
Contributed by
jyssvw22
on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 07:32:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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With the world in the balance
A generational gap
As the eyes watch in silence
Imminent overlap
Of seasons firsts
To last summer’s sap
Borders to withhold
Or cogently entrap
Classical twists
The rabbit from the hat
Or the typical
Key right under the mat
Would you tempt me
As novel an idea is
As just like that
The harvest of season
Has been collected
Protected is the reason
Why I have been neglected
Poetic is the disease in
Why I give a damn
Why I feel the urge to be sympathetic
Barely half a man
Or is that pathetic?
This is not a confession
I am not apologetic
I am however
Utmost humanly genetic
Or is that generic?
One of the same
Indistinguishable
Not even by name
Fuel to the fire
I will ignite this flame
To hell with your desire
Its me who’s gone
Insane
Or is that just pain?
Oozing out in rage
As I keep writing
Don’t bother turning the page
Why am I fighting this?
I should act my age
Paranoid
And a lot bit afraid
It’s not that bad a mess
A mess that I made
Or should I have gotten me a maid?
Yeah that’s right,
Now I am ready to say it,
I wish I had gotten laid…
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Re: I wish I had gotten Laid
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by brittaney on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 07:45:04 PM AEST
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This is really... different. Im not sure i get it though. Good job expressing yourself though!
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Re: I wish I had gotten Laid
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 07:48:19 PM AEST
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Maybe you need to : )
Interesting as always jyss...I really like the way you flipped the words around. Nice!!
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Re: I wish I had gotten Laid
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 07:55:33 PM AEST
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That last line clinched it for you.. well done.
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Re: I wish I had gotten Laid
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by all_the_dead_roses on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 09:28:40 PM AEST
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I like that you said what so many people are afraid to admit, or to scared to say, I lovethe form, good job. I like it alot
~Sara |
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Re: I wish I had gotten Laid
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by unluckicharmz on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 11:01:48 PM AEST
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| i dont understand the title but the poem was one of the best ive ever read in my life thats totally awesome!!! |
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Re: I wish I had gotten Laid
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 11:26:32 PM AEST
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kind of confusing, but I liked it nonetheless. I
don't really get how the last line fits with the
rest of the poem.
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