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That Frown!
Contributed by
inoc
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Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 08:49:46 AM in AEST
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hbadday
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Do you feel shattered and cut up inside
Walking in daylight you just want to hide
Shying away from family and friends
Thinking of dying and then happily pretends
Others look past you but you feel they are rude.
What are they looking at ?You may say something crude.
Have you ever thought ,
that maybe you should have been taught,
to say positive things to yourself!
File away that negativity in an underground shelf.
Your waisting precious -life time
even thinking of any shabby crime!
Look around you there is beauty in even a tree.
Focus on nature, even a simple buzzing bee.
Smile and look in the mirror
God made you not to feel horror.
A purpose, you were born for,
try searching your life- more.
The world is your oyster
enjoy it happily, be really eager....
The corner- to your life- is coming where will it go?
Be keen and excited -it's up to YOU -you know!
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inoc
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Re: That Frown!
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 09:11:04 AM AEST
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Kind of lost the flow around the middle I think. I really enjoyed this though, great write :)
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Re: That Frown!
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 09:35:56 AM AEST
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I was flowing right along pretty well until I hit the non-rhyming line,
"The world is your oyster, enjoy it happily, be really eager" ???
TRy... "the world is your stage, enjoy at any age" ? I really liked this poem, it made alot of sense. Appreciation begins in the eyes of the soul. Nicely done! Angel always...joni
p.s. deserves more than a two! Don't know who voted that, but it certainly deserves more than a two! |
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Re: That Frown!
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th July 2005 @ 08:34:38 AM AEST
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You just took my pic.
i have anxity and bipolar
and these are feelings i have everyday
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Re: That Frown!
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by Shorty_88 on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 05:05:00 AM AEST
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Hi Coni
I think this was a good write and i can empathise with your words.These are some feelings we all have at some time in our lives
Warmest Regards, Tara |
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