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Numb rush
Contributed by
In_a_While
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Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 10:07:37 AM in AEST
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i sit in some tall grass, facing a black past
crows are flying overhead
the wind is still whipping, the end of trees ripping
the sky now bleeds over red
i stretch out my hand, to reach for black sand
then bury this body of skin
i'm leaving my bones dry, to let the tears not cry
my spirit's anorexic within
now i wander away, haunt life for dull play
then eat dumb flies from the web
i wake up with shivers, the pill still delivers
i brief numb rush to the head
but that's okay...
morning's are swell when i wake up in hell
dw
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Re: Numb rush
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 11:51:44 AM AEST
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VERY impressive...Well, well done. Your expression is excellent in this piece! "My spirit's anorexic within...." Great line.
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Re: Numb rush
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by sride686 on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 12:02:51 PM AEST
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| Well DW this was a good write but your mind is looking down the same path mine does. This line is my life everyday “morning's are swell when i wake up in hell”. Good write like always keep it up and I do look forward to more. Keep your head up there’s always tomorrow my friend and yes things will get better. Life is short just live your life and fulfill your dreams you only get one so make the best of it. Bye for now my friend….Steve |
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Re: Numb rush
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by Willofree on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 12:11:11 PM AEST
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Very graphic, and loaded with powerful imagery. I, too, really like the line..."my spirit 's anorexic within...". What a powerful statement. Is that last line meant to be sarcastic, like why should mornings be any better?
Powerful write, very impressive
Will |
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Re: Numb rush
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by Dorkfish on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 03:40:29 PM AEST
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| Wow! That one was great! That was one of the best poems I've read so far!!!! |
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