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All My Own
Contributed by
Man_On_high
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Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 12:31:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I'm always seen
as vaguely unlimited
with shifting problems
all my own.
Firm with the understanding of life
and the nature of the systems
that construct it.
My logical primary purpose
abstract formal and unspoken
designed and equipped
with resolve to accept truth
and the allied notion
of peace and forgiveness;
but in depsiar I weep
with tears that ebb and flow
my liquid soul...
A pounding surf
on a bloodstained beach
that's all my own.
M.O.H.
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Man_On_high
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2005-06-13 00:31:08]
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Re: All My Own
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by Doriens_Picture on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 02:18:33 AM AEST
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a great write but the one part that hit me was at the top
vaguely unlimited
just makes you think
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Re: All My Own
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by Masked_Man on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 02:36:20 AM AEST
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this poem really struck me to my core
an amazing poem moh-
MM |
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Re: All My Own
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 03:23:08 AM AEST
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astounding write, very meaningful and deep.
i thought this was a pleasure to read and it really touched me when you spoke of weeping....despite having a purpose...sometimes purpose is not enough.
well done & all the best for you. XXX |
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Re: All My Own
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by wizard on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 07:48:19 AM AEST
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| an excellent and saddening poem. really full of emotion, moh. |
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Re: All My Own
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 08:13:27 AM AEST
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self inflicted pain ?
A pounding surf
on a bloodstained beach
that's all my own.
Rita
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Re: All My Own
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by jyssvw22 on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 08:57:58 AM AEST
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this was a good write,
thank you for sharing
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Re: All My Own
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 11:56:02 AM AEST
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Geez Billy; this really is sad...:(((((
Well done and I sure hope things improve for you soon....Haunting ending btw. Take Care.
Scorp. |
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Re: All My Own
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by gwenevere on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 12:47:57 PM AEST
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| This is beautiful.Well written and full of emotion.thought provoking too |
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Re: All My Own
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by freckle on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 09:13:52 PM AEST
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Good write...your last two stanzas remind me of a poem I just posted today. Weird. I like you images, very vivid. I also like how you chose cold words for the first part and alive words for the second....really good.
Carol |
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Re: All My Own
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by nanb294eva on
Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 05:31:56 PM AEST
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I AM THERE FOR YOU
AND INSTEAD OF ALL YOUR OWN
THEY WILL BE OURS NOT ALL YOUR OWN
I LOVE YOU
AND LISTEN
AND TALK
AND HEAR EVERYTHING YOU SAY AND
ALL YOUR HURT I WISH I COULD TAKE AWAY
LOVE NANCY |
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Re: All My Own
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th June 2006 @ 06:30:03 PM AEST
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Sweet Billy~
My intial thought upon reading this was .. boy I wish I hadn't read this tonight.. and then I
realized, how selfish that was of me! But, that is just how amazingly deep your writes
reach ... to the core!! I feel like you almost looked inside of me when you wrote this
[obviously not, as I didn't know you when ..]. BUT, a tortured soul is sentient to another
tortured soul .. akin to all their struggles ..
Exceptional write here, but I was especially moved by ..
"but in depsiar I weep
with tears that ebb and flow
my liquid soul..."
Holy wow! Yes, sad and completely forlorn, but damn that is some fabulous poetry!!
Here for you ..
ever and always
~Breezy
♥
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