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Deranged
Contributed by
judasman
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Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 07:50:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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all your life, youv'e been fighting
losing every time,never winning
and the pressure keeps on growing
until your mind begins to crack
and finally your brain explodes
into an orgy of violence
and after all these years of fighting
you finally think that you've won
that at long last you're a winner
but then you see what you have done
and you realise that you've lost again
and that you'll never get another chance
this was the last chance you'll ever have
from now on, you will be hated
people will be disgusted by you
disgusted that one man could stoop so low
all this you realise as true
and as the tears, fill your eyes
you turn the gun on yourself
YOU ******* SELFISH *******
NO ONE ELSE HAD TO LOSE WITH YOU
Copyright ©
judasman
... [
2005-06-12 19:50:27]
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Re: Deranged
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by waos on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 08:11:55 PM AEST
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Oh wow, I didn't expect it to end as it did, but this definitely fits under
grief and tragedy poetry. This was a thought provoking poem in
my opinion, and those are the best. Nice work.
~Kara |
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Re: Deranged
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 01:12:27 AM AEST
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nice write i especially liked the last line since
that is exactly what happens when someone
kills themself. Wonderfully written I am glad I
stumbled across it.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Deranged
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th January 2006 @ 02:58:49 PM AEST
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wow, great write.
thanx 4 sharing |
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