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Worse Than the Disease
Contributed by
spike
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Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 07:27:59 PM in AEST
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I thought loneliness would eat me hollow,
Empty as a brittle shell
Leaving me to beg and borrow,
Who thought you would as well?
I feared the worm of grief would never still,
A writhing pain inside my chest
Never thinking a greater ill
Would pose a harsher test
In my hunger and my need,
You taught me what it's like to bleed
Took my heart and ground it fine,
Savouring my tears like wine
Why is love a two-edged sword?
To cut me deep with every word
Promises that flirt and tease,
The cure is worse than the disease
So there you go and I'm what's left,
Sorrier than when I was without
The jilted lover, now bereft
But better off without a doubt
In time the sore and lonely heart,
Will find its way to kinder hands
Choose love wisely from the start,
For wolves are mindful of the lambs.
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spike
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Re: Worse Than the Disease
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 11:41:42 PM AEST
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i do love this poem, it was a pleasure to read & i could sense the pain and the emotion in your writing.
i can relate to your thoughts very much so this poem did touch me in a way. but well done, great poem! |
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Re: Worse Than the Disease
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by emystar on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 02:55:32 AM AEST
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A masterpeice you have created here.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Worse Than the Disease
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by Avarice_Riot on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 10:26:12 PM AEST
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Why is love a two-edged sword?
To cut me deep with every word
Promises that flirt and tease,
The cure is worse than the disease
Yet we still fall for it every time, because we need it. On the whole, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem, it tugs at the heart. Congrats, Spike, on being able to wear your heart on your sleeve and produce an emotionally-driven piece like this. |
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Re: Worse Than the Disease
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by priss on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 01:39:39 AM AEST
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| i love this poem, esp. the end, it is so true. but we have to feel pain before we can know what happiness is, right? |
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Re: Worse Than the Disease
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 10th July 2005 @ 12:25:44 PM AEST
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Awesome poem...
Jenni |
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Re: Worse Than the Disease
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 10:27:02 PM AEST
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Oh, my GOD! yes yes, this is excellent! Methinks thou hast
found your way into my very head......damn, that was good, spike!
Nay, not good. Excellent! Phenomenal! Stupendous! Stellar!
Shall I go on? I have many more words in my thesaurus! lol All
kidding aside, it truly was remarkable. You are wonderful at
capturing emotion. This poem was a smashing example
of the naked truth. The last stanza is my favourite. Wise words,
my friend. Very wise...
*hugs*
~Breezy |
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