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My rainy days
Contributed by
youngpoet
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Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 12:58:55 AM in AEST
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My rainy days
There’s no point now, why even try?,
I wish I could lay here in the rain and just die
All hope I used to have has now bin lost,
I wish this would end; I wanna pay the cost,
But you just can’t seem to accept me the way I am,
You know what dad? I don’t give a damn,
Why’d you and mom have to go separate ways?,
And why do you put me through all these rainy days?,
How could both of you get to be so low?,
The last time I felt loved was a long time ago,
You have both fought through me for my whole entire life,
Why do u have to put me through all this pain and strife?,
And dad, I know that you always seem to think,
That I’ll grow up to be a drunk because mom always drinks,
But your no better than her, I mean.. You’ve bin married twice,
And now you have a girlfriend, who isn’t very nice,
So maybe mom has bin married more times than you,
Four as a matter a fact and I know that that is true,
But I know both of you have problems of your own,
Why do you force them on me and make me feel so alone?,
I know the things I have done, aren’t always right,
But you make me feel so bad that it keeps me up through the night,
All these cold rainy days have put me in a hurl,
Thanks for making me grow up to be a 14 year old suicidal girl…
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Re: My rainy days
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 01:39:36 AM AEST
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awww im very sorry, this was a very heart-wrenching and honest poem so i did like it alot. I used to feel this way as well and I am a relatively new poet too, it does help when you write it down. but well done, you are very promising.
good luck to you, keep strong. |
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Re: My rainy days
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by deathdrop on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 08:48:35 AM AEST
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mmm, well i'm 15 years old, and i feel you're pain too... maybe not in as many painful ways, but trust me, i've felt the way you feel now.
and the only way is up now.
... if you wanna chat then PM me, if not, then good luck all the same. |
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Re: My rainy days
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by xXcrossedXx on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 04:11:49 PM AEST
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I'm 14 as well as just got out of being suicidal though if ever given the chance I instantly would kill myself so I guess I still kind of am.. but yeah I understand and I'm sorry all this has happened, poetry is a good way to vent it :)
And actually I like this piece a lot its creative and expressive, nicely done.
you can message me if you'd like
--amanda-- |
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Re: My rainy days
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 07:22:10 PM AEST
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This is heartbreaking....a very emotional piece. I hope things are better for you.
Another great write....
Jenni |
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Re: My rainy days
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by sprinter27 on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 08:27:07 PM AEST
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i'm really sorry this all happened.... and yes, we all feel suicidal at times. i know i have. like this morning i was thinking.... i don't know if i want to grow up and put up with the pain of life. i really could've ended my life right then and there. but, it's kindof hard in a car w/ a parent right next to you. and i know that it's going to be hard to fight it, but we have to fight the urge to suicide. and i was also thrown in the rain-- by my best friend. plz don't kill or hurt yourself. understand that i'm right next to u out in the rain. PM me if you need to talk. oh, and i like the poem a lot. keep up the good work!
~sprints
p.s. i hope it all works out for the better! |
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Re: My rainy days
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by Arden on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 05:02:08 PM AEST
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That last line... wow... that was a really, really powerful line.
this didnt need to be complex or complicated. it was how it was suppose to be, and its... so many things. heartbreaking, emotional, strong, and it just seemed to hit a nerve in me, which doesnt happen to often.
if you hadnt said you were new at poetry then id have thought that youve been writing it for a long time. keep it up. good work :)
-Arden |
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