|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
I died today
Contributed by
UnfallenTears
on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 04:25:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
|
Innocence stolen by her father
"Why, Daddy?" cries one small girl
Tears mix with blood as he rapes away her purity
Violated out of her own virgin world...
One little girl died today...
He stood up and faced the world
And it turned its back on him
A silver blade dances across his skin
He bleeds the pain away as the world around dims
One outcast died today...
Lost a home, husband, and children
No more loving curiosity
Left alone in heartless rejection
Tears her only companion in a world of animosity
One mother died today...
One old man tries to remember
His young grandson's name
He smiles at his family's tear-soaked faces...
As they watch him slip into a world of unknown fame
One grandfather died today...
Left alone here...
No one ally in this forsaken surrender
Drowning slowly in unfallen tears
As idealistic dreams hollow their only defender.
I died today
Copyright ©
UnfallenTears
... [
2005-06-11 04:25:09]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: I died today
(User Rating: 1 )
by gwenevere on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 04:33:46 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| This is an amazing write.How right you are.People are dying inside every day.Well done |
|
|
Re: I died today
(User Rating: 1 )
by xXcrossedXx on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 06:17:31 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Great write, I really enjoyed this. If there was one thing I'd comment on itd be the order, the little girl kind of start out of no where and really strong you may have wanted to start with something someone was expecting.. that's just me - it was a great write! Keep up the good work.
--amanda-- |
|
|
Re: I died today
(User Rating: 1 )
by Sinned on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 07:17:31 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Unfallentears
One abused suffers a thousand deaths; then more.
This story is very sad,but storis like this need to be told.
You did a triffic job on writting this."Keep it up"
Sinned |
|
|
Re: I died today
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 12:02:28 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| really sad and such strong words and phrases. nicely thought out too. well done. chris. |
|
|
Re: I died today
(User Rating: 1 )
by deathdrop on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 02:18:00 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
i know what you mean, and i can hnestly say that,i know exactly how YOU feel.
powerful write.
keep your head hie. |
|
|
Re: I died today
(User Rating: 1 )
by heartless_soul on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 12:34:49 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Truly a magnificent poem you portrayed this point of view wounderfuly, I know what its like to be dead to the world but still living, Yoru opening stanza was very desturbing, but true that does happen.... I am loooking forword to reading more from you later. be well.
*H_S* |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
