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something i meant to say
Contributed by
sidra
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Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:18:24 PM in AEST
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oops
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I'm sitting here thinking there's something I meant to say, but didn't yet.
That I ought to, but can't. That I am not who I presumed myself as.
Just a teardrop of blue at the heart of the flame. Just a crumpled piece of paper that wanted to be a page.
I'm sitting here now with everything behind me and nothing ahead. And I wonder. I wonder what's next.
Just silver plated dreams that turn my heart green. Just a lifetime of poetry. And all those reasons. All those reasons it was written.
Colors on the verge of grey. Eyeslashes caging a stray tear. And still I can't help thinking there's something I wanted to say.
Copyright ©
sidra
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2005-06-10 21:18:24]
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Re: something i meant to say
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by all_the_dead_roses on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:30:17 PM AEST
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it's so deep, short, and to the point. I loved it. It seems to explain so much in just those little lines. It was so awesome. I seem to relate to it oh so well, wonderful piece. Marvelous. Good job
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Re: something i meant to say
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 11:28:44 PM AEST
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It's eloquently written, but the topic seems a bit all over the place. It's a bit lacking in the area of flow. Try making the lines shorter. Longer lines are likely to distract the reader.
keep writing,
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Re: something i meant to say
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Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 11:28:44 PM AEST
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It's eloquently written, but the topic seems a bit all over the place. It's a bit lacking in the area of flow. Try making the lines shorter. Longer lines are likely to distract the reader.
keep writing,
mich |
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