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Pain To Paper
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 08:12:44 PM in AEST
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This ink sheds light on the shadows of my pain
Like someone to confide in, and absorb the blame
This paper, my imaginary friend
To hold my secrets and never bend
Like a butterfly ride to the sky above
The place where I escape, and finally feel love
Where I release my feelings and empty my emotions
And create waves of words as beautiful as the ocean
To feel the void and numb the null
To form and ocastra to mask the dull
Like the act of breaking my binding chains
And do as I want, while going against the grain
. . .
Another poem writen, and I am the creator
Another page filled with words, from my pain to paper
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ForeverAlone
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by xXcrossedXx on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 08:56:09 PM AEST
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I Love it Clark! this is wonderful! and the ending was phenominal! Outstanding write. Keep it up, I loved it.
--amanda-- |
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:06:20 PM AEST
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There is something perplexing about this piece...
The first 2 lines are bold and appealing, an excellent introduction to the piece.
An emotive comparision.
"To feel the void and numb the null
To form and ocastra to mask the dull"
This line, most appeals to me, yet I cannot help wondering whether you meant to express: "To form an orchestra to mask the dull".
If not, then I do apologise.
I simply adore the 2 lines, regardless.
I like the concept of "going against the grain"...it is an emotional notion, most well expressed.
And the outro is fantastic.
It is much like a signature.
Well done :)
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:09:23 PM AEST
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| the ending doesnt seem forced at all. wonderful read clark. it is good to see you posting again and to read your poem first among all others with me just getting back. your first line is mine now =] |
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:11:50 PM AEST
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awesome poem!! i like it a lot. and yes pain to paper. i know what you mean. i liked the whole poem, but especially the last stanza!!! keep up the great work!!!
~sprints |
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:23:01 PM AEST
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| OUTSTANDING CLARK!!! Your words are so beautiful and meaningful, i can relate to your thoughts very well. o keep it up, i love your work sooo much!!! If only I had half your talent ahhhh im so jealous hehe. No I love it! XXXX |
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by heartbroken4ever on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:50:24 PM AEST
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Yes babe good write but sometimes putting it on paper isn't enough
Love you
Amber |
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by grin69 on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 11:34:14 PM AEST
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| Wow! I really like this one. |
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by gwenevere on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 04:38:29 AM AEST
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| An excellent subject well voiced.We all get our emotions onto paper whatever they are.It is a great release.Put a little joy on paper and feel some joy return to you.good luck |
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 11:03:15 AM AEST
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Excellent! Nice job...Great flow, emotion, wording...Strong beginning and ending.
Scorp. |
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Re: Pain To Paper
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by JamesStockdale on
Wednesday, 5th August 2020 @ 02:48:50 PM AEST
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| Awesome indeed! |
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