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Staccato
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 01:20:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Tripping
tripping down the tunnel
images and light funnel
Driving
driving ambition at a stall
around the curb is a pitfall
Patience
patience slipping grip
going down with the ship
Perseverance
perseverance running free
brain and heart cannot agree
Denial
denial a road less travelled
hidden shadows unraveled
Description
description of a minds eye
answers to questions in short supply
Fortress
fortress built on solitude
walls reinforced, steadily accrued
Armor
armor strapped on, pulled tightly
a knight creeping ever so slightly
Window
window replaces a door
brittle spirit starts to restore.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-06-07 13:20:32]
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Re: Staccato
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by jyssvw22 on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 01:32:42 PM AEST
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SCORP you have done it yet again....
fantastic write....
i like the repeated word theme...good flow |
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Re: Staccato
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 02:14:41 PM AEST
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great job your reach deep I like that
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Re: Staccato
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 02:22:09 PM AEST
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On baby, are you ever getting there! All the things needed for a strong climb back up the rope to yourself. Ah, I am loving this one.
big smiles,
Rita |
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Re: Staccato
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 04:29:22 PM AEST
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wow!!
I love the originality!!
Keep em coming, where ever they come from! |
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Re: Staccato
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 06:10:03 PM AEST
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i like this it's like a mural a little symphony of
poems, staccato means stiff notes played
muffled, very nice . . .
Ben
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Re: Staccato
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by Jimmato on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 06:26:03 PM AEST
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| It came accross as frantic scorp, it was certainly different for you good work |
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Re: Staccato
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by freckle on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 09:26:36 PM AEST
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*claps* Great write! I love playing with words and you did it so well in this poem! Sometimes the ones that come out of no where are the best indeed! Wonderful, intriguing write!
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Re: Staccato
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 8th June 2005 @ 12:00:56 PM AEST
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YIKES! :) ....from a very creative mind it would appear. Not only significant areas for focus, but rhyming as well. DISCERNMENT, how random indeed, does Tripping down...to Window restore appear to be?
This was a really fun and very impressive read. Great job, Scorp
Will |
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Re: Staccato
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by boobiepeach on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 04:39:04 PM AEST
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good use of words. i like it its unique. good job.
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Re: Staccato
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by Dorkfish on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 03:26:33 PM AEST
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Very nice!
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Re: Staccato
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd July 2015 @ 11:50:25 AM AEST
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The ***** you say ???!!!?!? How did I not comment on this? I am fairly sure I read it as it looks very familiar. Oopsies.
Abstract indeed. Random and abstract to say the least. I like the way you just went with it. |
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