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Mystery
Contributed by
amanda_13
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Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 10:07:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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Have you ever looked at the sea?
Now think about it I mean really looked at it
Well when i look at it it is a mystery
Every little wave has something that caused it
Every little creature has its own job
nothing to lose but its life
no real feelings or maybe they do have them
I guess that is up for discusion
Yet have you noticed when you look deep in the seas eyes
It seems it looks right back at you
With every stare it sinks deeper in your heart
Making you want to jump in
to feel the water in you hair
Going through every strand
Nothing can take this feeling away
Except being traped under
That can make you feel scared
And make you hate the sea
make you want to never enjoy it again
Never to live this wonderful feeling again
Copyright ©
amanda_13
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2005-06-05 22:07:04]
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Re: Mystery
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by emystar on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 10:15:32 PM AEST
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Well I have now. I kindda like to stay close to shore.
This write is majic. I haven't been to the beach in quiet some time but u jus took me there with this awesome masterpeice.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Mystery
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by toserious2 on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 02:53:38 AM AEST
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| Bit disturbed to find your expression...Tilte is highly touchy but your expression was never as alive to comply with it....Sorry..but did not get the taste what i wished to have.....Get yourself more sharp in your imagination and expression....Rashid....toserious2 |
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Re: Mystery
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by IceQueenElle13 on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 12:18:06 PM AEST
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Uhm...I can't say this is one of the best things I've read. The title doesn't fit, and it doesn't really give any real feeling. Take words and push tons of meaning behind them, and don't try to be as good as someone else, because that makes you fail at orginality.
*Elle* |
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