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Not Heaven Sent
Contributed by
spazz911
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Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:12:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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pain and heatfelt
despair and grief
these are the words
that describe my speech
I heard you, I listened
I thought you heard too
but the truth is you didn't
and right now I hate you
can't express anger
but wont tell a lie
your decisions are fuetal
and in the end they will die
you said one thing
but another was meant
starting to feel that
your not heaven sent
you lied and you stabbed
went back on your word
and now you are hanging
on some other girl
it makes me so mad
and you weren't even mine
so whos to believe
when loves on your mind
who will be next
in your list of friends
I thought she was worth it
but I'm not right, again
Copyright ©
spazz911
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2005-06-05 21:12:08]
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Re: Not Heaven Sent
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by sprinter27 on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:20:19 PM AEST
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aww... i loved it!!! but tell me, who's this about??? i thought i knew... and then another line came up and i'm confused!!! i'm confused, but please, my shoulder is open. i have 2, you know. one for you and one for jennie. use them please!!! keep up the good work!!
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Re: Not Heaven Sent
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by juliette on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:21:07 PM AEST
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My first read of the night - and I liked it! Good job! Thanks for sharing,
juliette |
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Re: Not Heaven Sent
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:21:32 PM AEST
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Very emotionally driven write. Good flow. One small thing: Futile not fuetal. Other than that, good job.
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Re: Not Heaven Sent
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by emystar on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:21:58 PM AEST
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Very good write.
a masterpeice.
huggs,
emy
This write shows great creative thinking. |
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Re: Not Heaven Sent
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by blue_angel on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:36:26 PM AEST
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you lied and you stabbed
went back on your word
and now you are hanging
on some other girl
it makes me so mad
and you weren't even mine
so whos to believe
when loves on your mind
these lines make me wanna think this is about derrick... am i right? pm me n tell me cuz ill ferget to ask tomoro lol. a great write... would be more clear if i knew who u were talking about lol. u are a brilliant poet kc!
luv n hugs,
jennie* xXx |
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Re: Not Heaven Sent
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:51:10 PM AEST
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| friends are a dime a dozen |
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Re: Not Heaven Sent
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by jessalynn on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 01:40:57 PM AEST
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| the write lets me in to feel your pain and frustration..and i have been there time and time again...i like revenge |
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