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Summer Dazes
Contributed by
sinned
on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 09:09:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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Spring a few weeks over
Rain gone humity come
Lazy days of summer begun
Looking for a four leaf clover
On a lawnchair scaning the grass
Sweat beads on my forehead
Forgetting last winters dread
Almost wishing the day would pass
From wet to hot; Gezz
A robbin lites on the lawn
Too hot to fly a little too warm
The still of summer not a breeze
Dandylions a puff of seed
I blankly stare
No air
I breath I whezzed
Not a movement of a maple leaf
Retirement is good
For all things I thank You God,
but I'm going inside to get some relief
Sinned
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2005-06-02 21:09:59] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Summer Dazes
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 10:03:04 PM AEST (User
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I loved the way you set up this write. Its has a very nice style to it and has a unique flow to it. Excellent job.
A very good nature write.
keep writing
keep smiling
sweetstranger
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Re: Summer Dazes
(User Rating: 1 ) by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 01:36:57 PM AEST (User
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Beautifully and skillfully penned Denis this.
In a certain way in makes me sad, as a former child of the alps, the transition from winter to spring can hardly be noticed.
Wit oe explosion then it is summer. I miss the TRANSITION
Your poem makes me feel it even keener.
Fine job
Blessings
Elizabeth |
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Re: Summer Dazes
(User Rating: 1 ) by Arden on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 09:38:28 AM AEST (User
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hmm imagery wise it was good. maybe it would be a tad bit better if it was rhymed?
it was set up nicely though. good work.
-Rebekah |
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Re: Summer Dazes
(User Rating: 1 ) by BEBE on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 02:09:32 PM AEST (User
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Very nice write..
GODBLESS
BEBE |
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Re: Summer Dazes
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 03:09:46 AM AEST (User
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Beautiful write. Great imagery. |
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