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My Longing
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:14:55 PM in AEST
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My Longing
I long for what I cannot have,
And I'm left to be sad.
My visage smiles at me
Knowing that dreams
Do come true
Since things are reversed
When you look at you.
Reality is perverse
When you see both sides
That are only lies
Of what you can never have,
And I still long to be sad.
I have no want for what I never had.
I want more than that.
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Re: My Longing
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by ForeverAlone on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:25:41 PM AEST
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This is amazing jen, very well done, as always
~The broken record |
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Re: My Longing
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by emystar on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:26:27 PM AEST
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Very thought provoking write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: My Longing
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:27:59 PM AEST
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I have no want for what I never had. I want more than that.
I love this quote. Long for all you want. If you never had any of the things you wanted then you certainly deserve much more than that.
Rita
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Re: My Longing
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by Shishke_Bob on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:30:06 PM AEST
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this was an intersrtin read... I dont quit know what to say about this one because it explans itself so well. the flow was easy and the structure was good and helped it along, I love the last two lines
"I have no want for what I never had.
I want more than that.
it was just woundeful. read you later. God bless.
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Re: My Longing
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:32:36 PM AEST
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This poem very effectively weaves back and forth between believing she can't have....then can have...to finally..."I want more than that.
Very effective style, well done
Will |
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Re: My Longing
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 09:18:50 PM AEST
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Really interesting write, E9.. Extremely thought provoking...
Jenni |
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Re: My Longing
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by DorianChambers on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 01:31:17 AM AEST
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This is realy a beautiful and sensitive peice,
as always u r a magnificent writter . . .
Benedetto John Papa Sr.
aka. Dorian Chambers
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Re: My Longing
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by blowfish_jane on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 03:09:24 PM AEST
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I love the first stanza it just rings "brilliance" in it.
Great writing as always Jen.
Jane xx |
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Re: My Longing
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 03:34:21 PM AEST
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*sigh*
I have been missing out, it seems.
I am glad I got to read this Jen.
I really like how the first stanza goes into the second one. Sometimes, when people do like you did it can look sloppy. You did it well though.
Good write my friend,
I can relate more than you could probably guess.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: My Longing
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 03:35:08 PM AEST
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Once again your talent has no end awsome job Jen.
hugs |
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Re: My Longing
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 06:40:51 AM AEST
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I love the word weaving in this one!!
You are the clever one!
and the last two lines wrap it up wonderfully! |
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Re: My Longing
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 02:03:18 AM AEST
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Very in-your-face blunt, this one...I really like it! The flow is excellent, and sweeps your powerful feelings right along in this fine write.
Your ending, as usual, never fails---it's killer : )
Scorp.
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