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Climax of my Life
Contributed by
blue_angel
on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 07:27:17 PM in AEST
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A pool of blood
Collects at my feet
A stream of fear
Brings my defeat
Hair coated with sweat
Squeeze the life outta me
Take away my vision
Don’t let me see
A trail of black
Runs down my skin
Please God forgive
Relieve me of sin
Strip me of unpleased thoughts
Plunge into a red stream
Rinse myself off
Then come back out clean
Pinholes on my arm
Where you left your mark
My head gets dizzy
I hear the angels hark
A dark cloud lingers
Wants to take me, my friend
Thus the climax of my life
Will be the end
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Re: Climax of my Life
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 07:41:36 PM AEST
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| read some of my poems, like Corpse You Lick, and especially the ones before june of last year, such as Try and Sea of Black |
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Re: Climax of my Life
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:00:02 PM AEST
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Good poem it really made me think
especially the part about God because he
does make us clean. I wish you would of put
that part at the end though because hope in a
poem is always good. Nevertheless, I
enjoyed it.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Climax of my Life
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by emystar on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 03:38:56 AM AEST
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Sad but well said.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Climax of my Life
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by sride686 on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 01:52:27 PM AEST
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| All I need to say is this is a awesome write, but I’m going to say more. You showed so much pain in this write and it was worded very well with a strong ending. The ending makes the poem for it is the last thought in the readers mind. This poem left me breathless with pain and it was a great way to leave the reader. Take care and keep up these flawless writes and release all of the anger and pain you have in your life. Your friend always here to listen….Steve |
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