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The Empty Heart
Contributed by
THUGGIN4REAL
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Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 01:18:36 PM in AEST
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I sit alone in this empty heart, waiting for a reason, any reason not to depart, but the signal for love is fading and I’m starting to fall apart.
For so many years I’d felt nothing but hate, so I asked God to give me the strength to replace my hate for His love, but I knew I was on my own, because there was no answers from the heavens above.
So loneliness became my new love and bitterness was now my thirst, I knew I wasn’t heading in the right direction, because my heart wanted to burst, could you blame it? Since I was once surrounded by angels, but now followed by a hurse.
It’s like the world is falling on my face, so if it is, let it go; besides I am the lost piece of a puzzle, if you didn’t already know.
My eyes burned like they were on fire, that’s why I gave up smoking weed, because it no longer could take me higher, I needed something stronger, my hands were beginning to feel like ice, and I couldn’t let this pain go on any longer.
I tried getting help, people really started to care about me, but I was already a lost cause, so I told them to just let me be, because it was going to take a soul mate to set me free.
I have so much to offer, it’s just going to take the right girl for me to let it show, but then again why should I even bother, I’ll just let my heart hang with me, and we both can die slow.
So I still sit alone inside this empty heart, waiting for a reason, any reason to depart, so don’t rid me of this pain, just let me fall apart.
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by lil_angel on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 01:48:48 PM AEST
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| WOW! Great write! |
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 03:48:43 PM AEST
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thats beautiful.... I loved it.
-XOXO- |
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by Sinned on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 04:50:15 PM AEST
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THUGGEN4REAL
Powerful poem--Yeah a lot of us have been there--That deep dark abyss.I like the way you wrote it,instead of the way YPDC posted it.Good read,emotional yet sad.
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by nikole on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 05:53:33 PM AEST
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I have a comment 4 u.
Do you really love you girl?
A little bird told me you do, but i have to ask why do you break her heart? Each time you break up with her, you make her not want to come back or take you back so my question is what r u going to do different?
~LOVE ME?!? |
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:17:34 PM AEST
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| You expressed your emotions pretty well in this. I would've trimmed it up a bit, and I found a couple little jagged parts, but overall, this is good. Scorp. |
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 08:16:48 PM AEST
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| THUGGIN4REAL remember SLipSiX? Anyway this was an awesome poem, you really expressed your feelings and that special help that you want from above you will get it, if you have faith, you always have to have faith trust me it will work out, SLipSiX. |
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 09:14:35 PM AEST
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Hey thuggin,
Your poetry always touches my heart , everytime! I HAVE felt this way before , you DO have so much to offer , never give up and dont shut the people who love you out.Great poem, honest , beautiful and from the heart.
Leia |
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by xx_lil_devilish_angel_xx on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 05:57:36 AM AEST
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Very emotional poem, good choice of emotive language. Some bits need perhaps tidying up a little however the reader can feel your pain. Good use of enjambment, works well.
Take care,
Lots of love,
xx_little_devilish_angel_xx |
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 05:27:38 AM AEST
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wow and wow.
deep very deep |
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Re: The Empty Heart
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by jmpy84 on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 04:54:05 PM AEST
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| an awsome write great job |
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