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First Smile
Contributed by
vampyrekiss
on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 12:13:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Is I make this gash
I make sure this time it works
Cutting deep
To the bone
letting it all flow
As this is happing
A thought comes to mind
You will never know
The pain I went though
the suffring I took
So I'll leave you a note
I write in blood
On the walls
I will explain
I'm sorry for what I did
Please don't be mad
I'm happy now
you never knew
but now its through
its not your fault
please don't blame yourself
I love you
but hate myself
and now
I part from this place
with my first real smile
Copyright ©
vampyrekiss
... [
2005-05-31 12:13:04]
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Re: First Smile
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by Hikaru on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 02:09:57 PM AEST
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That was really good. I tried to commit suicide once, and even though I never went through with it, that describes my experience! Congratulations on this brilliant piece of work!
May I suggest you use verses though? It makes it easier to read!
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Re: First Smile
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by NoSaint on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 02:49:22 PM AEST
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this states well the state of mind but do you really think your problems end with the act of suicide...people need to step back and look at what they really believe cause if you take your pain with you what relief is there
Shari |
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