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Golden Days
Contributed by
jimmato
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Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 07:18:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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Golden days
Could not light my face the way she did
Turned away
Sun never shone like that before she came
I'd turn back time If I could
I need just one more day
I could not save her the first time
So I'll just say goodbye
I couldn't save me
I'm already cold inside
So why the hell should I cry
Sleepy haze
Could not dull your eyes, nor passing years
Come what may
Sun never smiled on me and I wish it did
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2005-05-30 19:18:03]
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Re: Golden Days
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 08:47:24 PM AEST
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| Very nice write...I like the way you pulled this together. Scorp. |
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Re: Golden Days
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 01:03:16 AM AEST
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very sad so sad.
good write |
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Re: Golden Days
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by Tanmaya on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 03:59:01 AM AEST
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This poem paints an imaginative, vivid and graceful picture...
The first four lines are especially lovely. |
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Re: Golden Days
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by Scarlett on
Wednesday, 8th June 2005 @ 05:48:09 AM AEST
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i've read a few of yours now and like your style. this was lovely but sad too.
i liked the way the first and last stanzas are laid out the same and rhyme, it rounds it off nicely. |
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