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Home upon the moon
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 02:38:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The moon had struck the earth again,
And it died beneath my feet,
Rivers dried in moments,
Consumed by fires heat.
Volcano's splurted metaphors,
And cows learned how to fly,
The world has changed once again,
And I really don't know why.
I watched the faces fade away,
Just melt into the ground,
And fossils turned and greeted me,
My new friends I had found.
They spoke to me in riddles,
As concrete roses bloomed,
And I found that I was wanting,
To live up on the moon.
The faces turned to stare at me,
Within their frozen beds,
No flesh and blood in front of me;
Only I was left.
The new friends they ignored me,
My heart was not their stone,
They jeered and laughed and booed me,
I was once again alone.
I watched my hope just fade away,
Just melt into the ground,
To the friends within the fossils,
The ones I thought I found.
I sung myself to nonsence,
But I found there was no room,
And I found that I was wanting,
To live up on the moon.
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 02:53:25 PM AEST
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(((((phil))))) ...even in your sadness you have written something with so much brilliance and beauty, truely an exquisite masterpiece of vivid lucidity, big hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 03:07:10 PM AEST
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Truly a masterpiece as Ness said... Great imagery....
Hugs
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 06:00:17 PM AEST
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This is touching phill it reaches out to me in
ways you 'll never know, as always your
writting is not only real and from the heart,
but so captivating, a beautiful peice of poetry
in every sences of the word . . .
Ben |
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 06:08:46 PM AEST
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Well, please do move off to the moon, for I fear they do not have very good reception up there and we could not be the receipents of your beautiful heart and soul. Some of us take a while to find our niche in life, but philly, you will. Don't despair, my sweet girl. You will.
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by hooray_its_jen on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 06:20:50 PM AEST
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Philly...I'm proud of you.
I'm not really brave enough to write as honestly as you do. But I'm so glad that you are. Because...when you're that honest, you seriously can't go wrong. And...you haven't yet.
I love you. (no really, I do.)
~Jenna |
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by shelby on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 08:17:59 PM AEST
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when I feel your words it is a super piece this is moving through and through I agree with Rita we cant let you move to the moon nope nope cant have that
Hugssssss
Michelle |
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 12:08:02 AM AEST
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wow philly girl this poem speaks to me.
so deep in meaning.
awsome job girl |
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 07:04:06 AM AEST
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Aww *hugs you*
Phil this was just heart breaking to read. I dont know what else to say. This was just to painful to read.
Jane xx |
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 08:29:18 AM AEST
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Yeah, isn't it ironic how the sadness seems to bring out the exceptional poet in us.
This one has great flow and rhyme and I especially like the message here, sad tho it may be. |
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 04:03:36 PM AEST
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Wow, Phil... this is a powerful piece of work. All the imagery is simply stunning, and you made it work just right. Deep, eloquent and very heartfelt. You captured this feeling (a sad one, and one that I recognize) in a very meaningful way.
(I guess you could say I liked it!)
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Re: Home upon the moon
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by boobiepeach on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 04:06:07 PM AEST
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very emotional, feeling
good work |
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