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Needles So Needless
Contributed by
ripper_something_unusual
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Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 09:04:23 AM in AEST
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I staple my eyes open,
Every morning I dont know why,
I cut the stitches from my mouth.
This pain is so tempting,
It grips me inside myself,
It gives me what I need to let it all out.
Am I masachoist?
Or am I just *****?
At something, Someone, or myself,
Am I a head case,
Drifting in a place,
Where pains the only thing thats good for my health.
Stick the needles
Stick the swords
and stick the A-bombs in,
I cant begin to describe,
How much I love this,
Make me dirty,
Make me cleaner,
Make me pure again,
I cant begin to describe,
I think Im losing my mind.
Wont you just shut up?
I dont know anything,
And I dont want to explain,
The little reasons,
Why I feel so hollow,
Insides theres no place to hide,
This could be anything
You are my everything
And though we dont talk,
All your screams just excite me,
All the ***** that you bring,
It doesent mean a thing,
Your dead but still I laugh inside,
Just to spite me.
Theres a simple explanation for all of this. These feelings you
are getting are the result of a suvere childhood trauma. We have
no choice but to put you in the best psychiatric unit money can buy.
Have a nice day sir.
Stick the needles
Stick the swords
and stick the A-bombs in,
I cant begin to describe,
How much I love this,
Make me dirty,
Make me cleaner,
Make me pure again,
I cant begin to describe,
I think Im losing my mind.
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Re: Needles So Needless
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 12:04:03 PM AEST
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| I like the wordplay you got going on here....A little choppy in some parts, and a couple spelling errors. Keep it up. Scorp. |
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Re: Needles So Needless
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by Cancer on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 03:03:57 PM AEST
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i like it.
"this could be anything
You are my everything
And though we dont talk,
All your screams just excite me,
All the ***** that you bring,
It doesent mean a thing,
Your dead but still I laugh inside,
Just to spite me."
that part made me smile. the flow and material are groovy. you deserve many skittles.
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Re: Needles So Needless
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by Versigh on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 07:27:20 PM AEST
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Wont you just shut up?
I dont know anything,
And I dont want to explain,
The little reasons,
Why I feel so hollow,
Insides theres no place to hide,
Not the best poem... a lot like mine actually. Very elaborate conversations... but I loved it. I think poetry it about the words and the feelings... not how it's placed together to be spoken. Keep up the good stuff! When you get the chance read some of mine.. |
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Re: Needles So Needless
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:09:56 PM AEST
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I agree with the wise Cancer this poem was
"groovy". A little demented but there's nothing
wrong with that. I liked how it started and I fail
to understand how I have missed you up until
this point.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Needles So Needless
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by injectionxinfection on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 07:01:29 PM AEST
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"I staple my eyes open,
Every morning I dont know why,
I cut the stitches from my mouth.
This pain is so tempting,
It grips me inside myself
"This could be anything
You are my everything
And though we dont talk,
All your screams just excite me,
i really liked those parts. i had to read this poem because it says needles are needless haha and my name's injection infection. so i thought it was ironic. good job though... read some of mine if ya like.. |
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