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Moonshadows
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 08:34:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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In the darkness did I chance
There to catch a fleeting glance
In Moonshadows did she dance
By the low and dimming light
Barely then my eyes could see
Was she there or was it me
Wishing for what couldn't be
Angel savior come tonight
Vision from the past it seems
As vaguely remembered dreams
Pirouetting in moonbeams
Raven hair blown by the breeze
Once a love I used to know
Twirling, swaying to and fro
Memories of long ago
Flood my heart like raging seas
Is she real or just illusion
Just a tired mind's delusion
On I gazed in such confusion
Do I dare to call her name
Or should I in silence stand
Disobey my hearts command
Fight the urge to touch her hand
Cower in my fear and shame
As Moonshadows faded slowly
This unworthy man and lowly
Prayed to all that he holds holy
Let this be my wish come true
But with sighs and falling tears
As the light of morning nears
Silently she disappears
Gone, Moonshadows, dreams and you
L. Carling c2005
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Rakerman1999
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Re: Moonshadows
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 10:27:45 AM AEST
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beautifully written, flowing, and excellent as always larry, i like the dreamish quality here, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Moonshadows
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 11:00:55 AM AEST
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as always beautiful poem lovely vissions with
this one, and as always bar keep u know the
drill, take a hike, the rake and i have bought
bought the bar, and were on a mission, great
writting as usual . . .
Ben
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Re: Moonshadows
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 11:45:52 AM AEST
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Its beautiful yet sad in the end kinda.
awsome write. |
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Re: Moonshadows
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by deepviolet on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 12:37:28 PM AEST
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| great imagery. i love the wonderful flow of the poem, like raven hair blown by the breeze... |
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Re: Moonshadows
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 11:05:48 PM AEST
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Larry this was beautiful. It was just so
mindboggling I'm not really sure what to say. I
must say that you are definitely NOT
unworthy though. Keep up the awesome
writing brother.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Moonshadows
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by jaeann on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 08:48:36 PM AEST
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wishing for what couldn't be......ahhh yes.....
i love your work...... |
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Re: Moonshadows
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 06:15:58 PM AEST
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A mystical and beautiful write with great imagery. Ah, the appeal of dream or fantasy, often more appealing then reality. This poem is so graceful, wonderful flow.
Another high class poem, sir
Will |
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Re: Moonshadows
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 10:53:18 PM AEST
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| Larry, I'm glad you still write beautiful poems like always. The poem flowed really well and I absolutely love the imagery. Nicely written. :) |
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Re: Moonshadows
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 12:02:34 PM AEST
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Oh my.
This one goes straight to my core, Lar.
Dare. Just... do. Every minute of every day, beneath and between each and every moonbeam's shadow. Dare - if only to ensure you never miss your chance at... it.
Feeling very close to this,
~Snem~
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Re: Moonshadows
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 05:33:34 PM AEST
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Very well written..
written in that old world style I love so much..
and often use myself-
Terriffcally poetic..
B |
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Re: Moonshadows
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by vibes2go on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 02:02:34 PM AEST
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| Oh if I could write like this .. it takes my breath away and I'm in tears. I feel a pain deep in your heart .. you always move me .. I've missed reading you .. I wish you'd post more .. but you always were quality over quantity ..lol. I write reams .. anyway this was lovely; sometimes I think you're a woman .. or a man with a woman's heart. I so love ... your writing. |
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Re: Moonshadows
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by slogan on
Wednesday, 7th December 2005 @ 04:39:36 PM AEST
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| A very touching piece of work.. great write...jh |
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